Talk:Frozen (Madonna song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 21:27, 13 July 2013 (UTC)

General

• Some links need dabbing
• One dead link in red

Info box

• Genres should be alphabetical

Lead

• while it was produced by both along with → and it was produced in collaboration with
• on a show → at a show
• who deemed it an album standout, → on of whom deemed it as a standout song on the album, [I doubt every critic said it was a standout]
• an album standout, and was labelled a masterpiece whose melodic beat and sound were described as "cinematic". → an album standout. It was described as being a masterpiece, and its melodic beat and sound were defined as "cinematic".
• on the Billboard Hot 100, → on the United States' Billboard Hot 100,
• Put how many her tally was with number 2 songs.
• I'd say that she performed it on Wetten Dass too, rather than just her tours.

More to follow

All  Done. Jorn ^talk 00:19, 5 August 2013 (UTC)

Background

• 1997 was a quiet year for Madonna. → This is unbelievably bias and not encyclopaedic. This needs to be removed.
• After she gave birth to her daughter, Lourdes, the previous year, she enrolled in → After Madonna gave birth to her daughter Lourdes, in 1997, she enrolled in
• These incidents inspired Madonna a lot, as she began introspecting herself. → The singer was inspired by these activities, as she began introspecting herself.
• The block quote shouldn't have quotation marks.
• A bad quality snipped of the track was leaked → A low quality snippet of "Frozen" was leaked

All  Done

Composition

• According to the sheet music from Alfred Publishing, → Redundant info
• F3 is lower than Ab3 (G#3), so not sure what's going on here?
• subtexts have been noticed. → Like?

All  Done

Plagiarism case

• The block quote shouldn't have quotation marks.

 Done

Music video

• Madonna thought that there is a lot of magical, mystical powers in a desert and is a magical place to be. → Madonna thought that there are a lot of magical, mystical powers in the desert and that it is a magical place to be.
• The block quote shouldn't have quotation marks. Besides, the quote box on the left is disrupting the block quote, as it just looks like a normal paragraph. Having a quote box, a picture or an audio file on the left hand side next to a block quote never works, as it doesn't allow for the block quote to be indented. I would remove the quote box and just make it normal prose.

All  Done

Certifications

• I'd update the format of the box to one like this. It's a lot more clear.

 Done

References

• There is a red link on the "Vorrath, Armin (2011). Eine außersinnliche Odyssee zu Madonna. Books on Demand."

 Done

Status

On hold  — AARON • ^TALK 11:50, 9 August 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Jorn ^talk 21:13, 10 August 2013 (UTC)

Passing.  — AARON • ^TALK 10:07, 11 August 2013 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.