Talk:French cruiser Amiral Aube/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Sturmvogel 66 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:18, 16 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

Criteria

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1. Prose   On hold

2. Verifiability   On hold

3. Depth of Coverage  Pass

4. Neutral  Pass

5. Stable  Pass

6. Illustrations  Pass

7. Miscellaneous   On hold

Comments

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  • "was a one of five Gloire-class armored cruisers " - I don't think "a" is necessary
  • " two singe-gun wing turrets" - I'm not particularly familiar with naval warfare, so I can't tell if "singe-gun" is a term I'm not familiar or a typo for "single"
  • Maybe I'm just missing something, but I'm struggling to find where the 174mm armor thickness for the barbettes is reflected in the prose
  • Infobox says it was laid down on 9 August 1899, prose says February 1901. The 1899 date appears to be the order date.
  • Infobox gives completion date of 17 April 1904, prose gives 1 April 1904
  • No need to link Canada per MOS:OVERLINK
  • "and she had required frequent repairs until she was sent to Brest for a refit in March 1916." - Not sure that "had" is necessary
  • Link Brest in the prose, most North American readers don't have a great grasp of French geography

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  • Generally Wordpress isn't a great source, but since it just seems to be hosting a primary source report, it's accessable, since the report is reliable and I'm assuming good faith that the Canada At War Blog properly posted the contents of the report. If a better hosting of the content is available, I'd recommend using that before taking this article to ACR or FAC.
  • I'm not seeing where the "French Cruiser Sully" from the references is cited at all. If it's not used, move to further reading.
  • The EL redirects to a home page, repair or remove.
  • Is there an OCLC, ISBN, or ISSN available for Kennan?

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  • Add a short description

That's it, placing on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 03:44, 16 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

This just goes to show the value of a second pair of eyes. Many thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:13, 16 June 2020 (UTC)Reply