Talk:Fire Emblem: Thracia 776/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Haha169 (talk · contribs) 07:31, 12 January 2017 (UTC)

Review

Hello, I will be your GAN reviewer for this article. Below are my comments:

Some copyedits: Overall not bad, some grammar and stylistic suggestions below:

• it originally released through -> it was originally released through
• No version has been released in the West. -> No version has been released outside of Japan.
• Maps hold a variety of different terrains, from flat plains to mountains: combined with a unit's own abilities, the environment affects movement. -> the colon in the middle should be a semi-colon, or at least: "from flat plains to mountains, and when combined with a unit's own abilities, affects movement."
• and range and speed of movement on the battlefield: these classes range from axemen and swordsmen to thieves -> separate into two sentences
• Thracia 776 was created by Fire Emblem series developer Intelligent Systems: it was designed and written by series creator Shouzou Kaga, and produced by Takehiro Izushi. -> Thracia 776 was created by Fire Emblem series developer Intelligent Systems, designed and written by series creator Shouzou Kaga, and produced by Takehiro Izushi.
• Kaga chose her after being favorably impressed by her drawing abilities, bringing her on board for both Genealogy of the Holy War and Thracia 776. ->Kaga chose her after being favorably impressed by her drawing abilities and brought her on board for both Genealogy of the Holy War and Thracia 776.
• with Kaga commenting that it would have been simpler to create a completely original title if they had seen how big the project would become -> with Kaga commenting that it would have been simpler to create a completely original title if they had known how big the project would become
• The Fatigue system was introduced to bring additional challenge. ->The "Fatigue" system was introduced to challenge players further.
• This version released on January 22, 2000. -> This version was released on January 22, 2000.
• reached 106,108 units as of 2002: this made Thracia 776 the worst-selling -> reached 106,108 units as of 2002, making Thracia 776 the worst-selling

Sources: All the sources look verifiable and reliable, just one suggestion:

• Add a lang= and trans-title= parameter into the Japanese language sources to help with verification

Great work with this article! I don't see anything wrong with stability, neutrality, or broadness in its coverage. No copyvio issues found, but I am having trouble with the dab links tool; I trust you've run it? Let me know once you fix the issues above and I will take a look at the article again. Best, haha169 (talk) 07:31, 12 January 2017 (UTC)

@Haha169: Thank you for the review! I have done all your suggested fixes (although I changed Fatigue to fatigue instead). I have added the lang parameter to Japanese sources, but as my Japanese knowledge is limited (and I was not the one adding them in the first place), I'd rather not attempt to do a direct translation of the titles. This is not a GA criterion anyway, so it should be okay for now.--IDV^talk 08:23, 12 January 2017 (UTC)

Well-written:

YI've given the article a copyedit and I'm satisfied that the prose surpasses WP:GA? guidelines and WP:MoS.

Verifiable with no original research:

YThere is no original research, everything is well sourced from verifiable sources, and no copvios found. I have found nothing in the article to be skeptical of, but be aware that editors may challenge certain aspects of the article (WP:NOENG) and translated quotes from the Japanese sources may be needed. But this is fine for now.

Broad in its coverage:

YThis article is comprehensive and stays on topic

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.

YThis article is neutrally written and shows no apparent bias.

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

YThis article is stable and there is no edit-warring currently happening.

Apologies, I accidentally clicked the "save changes" button early by accident. You've done a great job with this article, so I'm passing it! Good work, and congrats! --haha169 (talk) 09:16, 12 January 2017 (UTC)