Talk:Feeling This/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Azealia911 in topic Update

GA Review

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Reviewer: Azealia911 (talk · contribs) 13:06, 30 March 2016 (UTC)Reply


Full review coming soon. Azealia911 talk 13:06, 30 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead and infobox

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  • Cover art requires alternative text.
  • "correctional establishment" → "correctional facility" and link.
  • "students" → "inamtes"
  • "climbed to number two" is informal, try "peaked at number two"
  • "and in all of their concert tours." is a bold statement, do you have a source for this?

Background

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  • "came together" → "was recorded"
  • You cite the album's liner notes to back up that this song was the first recorded for the album, but it's not typical that album booklets discuss when songs were recorded in correspondence to each other, are you sure this information is in the source you cite?
  • You don't need to cite the same source twice in consecutive sentences, you can use the DRUM! source purely at the end of the paragraph.

Music

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  • I'd rename this section to "Composition" calling it "Music" would be likening to calling it "Song".
  • Pic of Barker needs alternative text.
  • "The song is particularly memorable for a section of the chorus of the song (right before the bridge begins), in which guitarist Tom DeLonge sings the vocals loudly and off-key." According to who, you?

Release

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  • Richard Cheese sentence needs a source, it can also be added to the second paragraph, it doesn't seem necessary to create a new paragraph simply for one sentence.

Commercial performance

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  • "it spent twenty-six weeks on the chart" source only says nine weeks.
  • "spent seven weeks on the Bubbling Under" source says eight.

Critical reception

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  • "felt the song an" → "felt the song was an"

Music video

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  • Pic of Lincoln Heights needs alternative text.

Formats and track listings

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  • The US vinyl and UK CD formats need sources.

Notes

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  • 3 – DRUM! MagazineDrum!
  • 5 – Link MTV News
  • 11 – Dead link.
  • 18 – Dead link.
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  • The first link is a private video.

Post-review comments

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  • A good article overall, I like your writing style, casual but not informal or unprofessional. Just a few tweaks needed and it's looking like a pass to me. Let me know when you've addressed my comments. Azealia911 talk 06:08, 13 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Update

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Hey! Sorry it took so long. I never saw the review. I've updated all dead links, and implemented most all of your suggestions. One thing: yes, the album booklet contains recording information. Thank you and sorry for the wait. Saginaw-hitchhiker (talk) 03:07, 29 April 2016 (UTC)Reply

Apologies also for my delay. Passing! Azealia911 talk 16:16, 11 May 2016 (UTC)Reply