Talk:Far Cry 4/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:53, 2 November 2015 (UTC)Reply


I'll have this to you soon JAGUAR  20:53, 2 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments

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  • "Far Cry 4 is an open world action-adventure first-person shooter video game" - some slight overlinking here. When the opening sentence is overlinked, I usually de-link video game, but I'll leave that up to you
  • "and journeying through the game's main story" - how about progressing?
  • "the costume of the game's antagonist Pagan Min was inspired by Ichi the Killer" - I would re-word this to inspired from Ichi the Killer, as it's referring to a specific character in the film
  • "The player-character is equipped with a digital camera, which allows hi to mark" - hi?
  • "and eventually Loot locations" - should loot be capitalised? I haven't seen it elsewhere
  • "However, the Map Editor did not support competitive multiplayer levels at launch" - does it support it now?
  • "Ajay is not able to leave the country as the royal army" - I think Royal Army should be capitalised, as I've seen it before
  • "An Easter egg ending can be found at the beginning of the game..." should this paragraph be in the endings section if it's from the beginning of the game? Feel free to ignore if I'm wrong
  • Escape from Durgesh Prison subsection is unsourced
  • "and therefore they avoided bringing back any characters from Far Cry 3 except for of Hurk" - error
  • "so that they cold bring those ideas back to the studio" - could
  • "The Shangri-la missions are not related to Kyrat" - Shangri-La

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On hold

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I thought about buying this game when it came out, but I don't know why I didn't. Nice work on this article, the prose is in good shape and references all check out. Once all the above are clarified then this should be good to go.   JAGUAR  21:13, 2 November 2015 (UTC)Reply

@Jaguar: Thank you very much for the review! I have fixed all the issues you have raised. AdrianGamer (talk) 09:24, 3 November 2015 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for addressing them! With all the issues clarified this should be good to go.   JAGUAR  16:34, 3 November 2015 (UTC)Reply