Talk:Fall Down (will.i.am song)/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Prism in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 19:19, 6 January 2014 (UTC)Reply

General overview

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  • Dablinks denotes one disambiguation link that needs correction.
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  • Checklinks does not denote any external link that needs correction.

Spot-checking to search for WP:OR

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  • One problem with "It was released to Australian radio stations in July 2013 as the third single from the record" inline citation: it does not specifically appear that it was released in July. It kind of hints at that but it doesn't really specify. Reword.
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  • Rest is alright.

References

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  • R7/R8/R12 → Buzz Media should be replaced by Spin Media
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Prose, redundancies and visual aspect

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Lead section

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  • "and was certified gold in both countries" → ", being certified gold in both countries."
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Critical reception

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  • "felt like one of #willpower's "interminable 15 tracks were written in the studio moments before they were recorded." → "felt like one of #willpower's "interminable 15 tracks [that] were written in the studio [...]"
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  • "delivered on "Ashtrays and Heartbreaks" Snoop Lion" → "delivered on Cyrus' collaboration with [nationality adjective] rapper Snoop Lion, "Ashtrays & Heartbreaks" (2013).
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  • "which Brent Faulkner agreed was "utterly ridiculous"." → although he agrees with the lyrics comment, the "utterly ridiculous" comment was directed to the song itself and not to the actual lyrics. Could you make a separate sentence? Also, add 'from PopMatters' next to Faulkner.
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Charts / Certifications

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  • Merge the two sections, adding a {{col-2}} template.
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Comments

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  • As usual, a good read and just a few comments to address. I will not have any problem passing this, I guess. 19:19, 6 January 2014 (UTC)

Second read-through and result

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  • I'm happy with the changes made, so, congratulations! prism 14:15, 7 January 2014 (UTC)Reply
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