Talk:Everard Digby/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Parrot of Doom in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aiken 14:15, 26 August 2010 (UTC)Reply

Looking close, just a few points, mostly based on prose, but also with 1b, 2a, 6b.

Lead
  • Would "foiled" work better than "failed"?
    • That would imply that the plot was purposely stopped - this isn't certain (although likely, depending on who you think authored the Monteagle letter). Fawkes capture could be viewed by some as an accident.
  • The last sentence of the first paragraph seems quite long - could it be split in two?
    • Yep, done.
  • Is "hunting party" a quote? Should be cited probably.
    • Its more that his group of men was ostensibly a hunting party, and not a "revolt party". This is explained in the body but I thought in the lead that scare quotes were the simplest way to get the message across.
  • Overall: it's essentially four paragraphs, but two are of two sentences or less. Might be better to merge them, so it's two/three paragraphs instead.
    • I've merged the first two, the last line I'd like to keep separate just to hammer home the ugly end he met.
  • Why is his place of birth commented out?
    • I'm not completely convinced that its his birthplace, he's often described as "Everard Digby of Stoke Dry, Rutland" but that may be where he lived. I don't think there's a parish register that records his birth. Parrot of Doom 16:17, 26 August 2010 (UTC)Reply
Early life
  • "The Digby family may have been founded..." According to whom?
    • Done
  • "a young heiress who brought with her..." She brought it where?
    • ...to the marriage. I couldn't think of a better way to express it, any suggestions?
  • '"calling eachother 'brother' when we wrote and spoke"' Should 'eachother' be one word, or is that typo? If the former, a [sic] might be good.
    • Added sic
  • What's a hidden chapel?
    • Catholicism was illegal, the chapel was a hidden room in the house.
  • "and possibly for this reason..." Seems a bit vague
    • Hey, this is 400 years ago :)
  • "He was apparently an unforgiving landlord..." According to whom?
    • According to Roy Digby Thomas, however I didn't mention him as it seemed fair comment, with his tenants complaining to the crown about his actions as a landlord.
Trial and execution
  • Is there a reference for the poem?
    • Done.
Images
  • Not sure how necessary it is to say an image is monochrome.
    • Alt text is one of those things I'm very glad was removed from the FAC criteria. I have no preference, if you want to delete it feel free. :)
General

Placing on hold. Aiken 15:30, 26 August 2010 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the prompt response. This now meets criteria, well done. Aiken 16:54, 26 August 2010 (UTC)Reply
Thanks :) Parrot of Doom 17:50, 26 August 2010 (UTC)Reply