Talk:Evelyn Nesbit/GA1
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Reviewer: Thine Antique Pen (talk · contribs) 10:38, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
WP:LASTNAME edit
Please remove all use of 'Evelyn' in the article, per WP:LASTNAME. Only include where you are stating their full birth name, which is in the lead. Use 'Nesbit' their surname or 'she' or something like that in the body of the article. Thine Antique Pen 11:40, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
References edit
To-do.
Lead edit
Needs lots of work. Does not summarise the article well enough. I would expect 2—3 paragraphs for this size of article. Thine Antique Pen 11:40, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
Early life edit
Modeling career edit
“Super-Model,” and “Pin-up Girl” edit
Edited entry edit
I've edited the entire Nesbit entry addressing the constructive comments provided by reviewers: Substituted "Nesbit" for "Evelyn" as appropriate throughout and re-wrote the lead in a summary format representative of the bio as a whole. Feedback welcomed. Betempte (talk) 19:47, 17 August 2012 (UTC)