Talk:Errantry/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tkbrett (talk · contribs) 18:03, 17 May 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Fell in love with this poem the first time I read it, so I'm excited to review this page. Tkbrett (✉) 18:03, 17 May 2021 (UTC)

Thank you for taking this on. I enjoyed working on the article and will be happy to address any issues you may have. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:24, 17 May 2021 (UTC)

Lead

• The second sentence mentions publication in The Adventures of Tom Bombadil, but the first sentence only says "first published in 1933." Consider adding that it was first published in The Oxford Magazine.
  • Done.
• "in revised and extended form" -> "in a revised and extended form"
  • In Britspeak it's right as it is, if that's ok with you.
    • Yes, that's ok.
• pipe Metre (poetry)
  • Done.
• "Metre and rhyming patterns are shared" can be made active as "It shares metre and rhyming patterns"
  • Done.
• Paul H. Kocher needs an introduction, whether it be writer, scholar, Tolkien researcher, English professor, etc.
  • Glossed.
• "called the pair" -> "calls the pair"
  • Done.
• Randel Helms needs an intro as well.
  • Done.
• "called it" -> "calls it"
  • Done.

Poem

• quote box is wonderfully informative!
  • Noted, thanks.
• "as described in The Lord of the Rings.": most readers are going to know that Tolkien wrote LotR, but some readers may not, so the book should be introduced as "Tolkien's 1954–55 novel", or some variation.
  • Done.
• "Christina Scull & Wayne G. Hammond": these two need introductions
  • Done.
• "quartet": can this be piped to quatrain? It's not a term I'm familiar with.
  • Done. The terms are equivalent so let's go with quatrain.
    • I was mentioning the use in the body: "The second and fourth line in every quartet rhyme..." Since you were okay with changing it in the infobox, I've gone ahead and changed it in the body as well.
• "This was so difficult that he" -> He found this so difficult that he"
  • Done.
• pipe Paeon (prosody)
  • Done.

Setting

• Image looks good and is properly tagged. Caption can be made active as 'Gilbert and Sullivan's "Major-General's Song" inspired the poem'.
  • We could, but the emphasis here is on "The poem".
    • Yes, I agree. Better to keep it as is.
• "The poem was set to music by the composer and entertainer Donald Swann" can be made active as "The composer and entertainer Donald Swann set the poem to music."
  • Done.
• link Song cycle
  • Done.

References

• copyvio score is a great 28.1%.
  • Noted.
• comparing against electronic sources and the print sources I have on hand, the article is reliably sourced.
  • Noted.

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold: A pleasant article for a pleasant poem. Happy to provide my support when the above concerns are addressed. Tkbrett (✉) 20:46, 17 May 2021 (UTC)
  • Thank you very much for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:44, 18 May 2021 (UTC)
    • pass: there was one other use of quartet in the body that I went and changed to quatrain (mentioned above) but that was a small quibble. This is a wonderful page! Happy to give it a pass.