Talk:English Cocker Spaniel/GA1

GA Review

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I will begin reviewing this article. I will massage the prose as I go. Please revert any changes I make where I inadvertently change the meaning. I will post queries below. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:45, 12 September 2009 (UTC)

• Lead - this should be a summary of salient points in the article - thus it should contain a one or two sentence description, note on health/genetic diseases, close relative dog breeds, and one or two other most important points. I will add a few in a minute. But "merry" sounds a bit unencyclopedic --> "good-natured"??

• I have not heard "cocker" as an abbreviation before. Is this recorded elsewhere and used?

• I'd convert the Height and Weight into a few sentences of prose for the Description section. good work

• Sentence 1 in the Colour section leaves me wanting to know which colours are seen that are not allowed in show competition. Also, is there any information on which are common and which are rare? better

• I'd remove the subheadings in the Health section as they leave very small sections - I'd add some notes on what Hip dysplasia means for a pet owner, a limping dog? a paraplegic dog? etc. Ditto the cardiomyopathy - is it early onset or late onset?

• The article really needs to mention how an English Cocker Spaniel differs from an American one, and it needs to be mentioned in the lead as well. Also, why the split?

• Please format the references and add parameters - author, accessdate, work etc. This is where I find the "cite" format really useful.

• If it is closer to the two springer spaniel breeds, then 1-2 sentences at the end of the description section should be added expalining similarities and differences. This also then satisfies lead requiremnts as a note mentioned in lead which is expanded elsewhere in the article.

Overall, has promise very nearly there - if we can sort out some content and structure, then I think it'll pass as GA, but some stuff needs to be done first. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:22, 12 September 2009 (UTC)