Talk:Edward William Archibald/GA1
Latest comment: 13 years ago by Focus in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: —focus 23:41, 5 November 2010 (UTC)
Nice article, if it is a bit brief. I'll have comments up as soon as possible.
- Intro
- Is surgery that much of a 'specialist' field? Was there a specific type of sugery he was interested in? If so, that should be mentioned in the intro.
- I find it awkward when you refer to Archibald as 'the surgeon' (you do this throughout the article). It almost seems as if you start talking about a different person, so it confused me at first. It's okay one or two times, but I'd recommend editing those out, unless you have a specific reason to keep them.
- Update: There are a few more points I could make, but since there hasn't been a reply for 11 days, I'm forced to fail the article. Just drop me a note if you'd like me to re-review it. —focus 04:10, 17 November 2010 (UTC)