Talk:Earl Campbell/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:12, 19 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 15:12, 19 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists)  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Early life and high school

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  • Add Campbell's birth date into this section

  Done

  • Remove the second mention of Barry Switzer being the Oklahoma Sooners head coach and dewikilink that mention since he is mentioned shortly before that particular sentence.

  Done

College career

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  • "In 1975 he" - missing a comma

  Done

  • Spell out AFCA in full

  Done

  • "Leg injuries kept him out of four games his junior season," - Leg injuries kept him out of four games during his junior season,

  Done

  • "against Rice" - I think against the Rice Owls is better

  Done

  • "in a 57–28 victory over rival Texas A&M as Texas finished the season undefeated." - With the second mention of Texas, do you mean the Longhorns?

  Done Yes, clarified

  • "He also won the Chic Harley Award and was a unanimous All-American," - All-American player?

That's the common terminology, so I think it's better as is. Although I just noticed I forgot to cite that, so cited now.

Houston Oilers

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  • Most Valuable Player should have the acronyms in parentheses on its first mention

  Done

  • "cut short due to wear and tear." - I think wear and tear should be replace with more formal wording

  Done Removed it altogether. I thought the same when I wrote it, but couldn't think of anything better. The source uses "too much pounding" which probably isn't any better.

  • The last section of the fourth paragraph is unreferenced

  Done

  • "In 1984, under new head coach Hugh Campbell, Houston started the season with six straight losses." - ditto

 Y Diddo

  • "He had four games of over 200 rushing yards, a single-season record that still stands as of the end of the 2015 season." - Is this still the case as of 2016?

The 2016 season hasn't started yet, so yes, it remains true.

New Orelans Saints

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  • Remove duplicate link of Bum Phillips

  Done

  • "and continued to have a diminished role in the offense through the rest of the season." - throughout

  Done

  • The last section of the first paragraph has no references

  Done

Legacy and honors

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  • Remove duplicate links of O. J. Simpson, The Sporting News and Tyler, Texas

  Done

References

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On hold until the above points have been actioned. MWright96 (talk) 18:50, 19 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96:  Y Fin. Lizard (talk) 02:27, 22 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thank you. Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 05:32, 22 August 2016 (UTC)Reply