Talk:Dutch invasion of Saint Helena/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 03:20, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Comments as follows:
Lead
edit- No obvious issues identified but wonder if Anthony Beale worth a redlink
Background
edit- the settlement at Cape Town in Southern Africa.[2][1] : if it's your preference, I note the refs are not in chronological order here. Actually, just noticed, these refs are redundant anyway as they are used again for the following sentence. I would just cite the entire paragraph to [1] and [2] at the end.
- established a settlement and fort.: perhaps namedrop Jamestown here (I assume that is the settlement referred to).
Dutch invasion
edit- Is there an appropriate link for the Dutch navy?
- Linked to Royal Netherlands Navy - Dumelow (talk) 08:04, 7 February 2022 (UTC)
- Would Jacob de Gens be worth a redlink? Ditto Anthony Beale.
- I suspect it is not available, hence its absence, but anything on the size of the attacking forces/garrison at Jamestown?
- which they renamed Good Fortune.: is the original name of the fort known?
- It looks like, apart from the first sentence, the entire paragraph could just be cited at the end with [3] and [4].
Recapture by English forces
edit- Link sloop, Royal Navy
- Add 4 May somewhere into the narrative; I assume that was the date the expedition arrived at Fisher's Valley.
- The second paragraph could be entirely cited to [3] and [5] at its end.
Aftermath
edit- and, later in 1673,: is this year correct? If so, suggest rewording to the effect of "later that year" or similar.
Other stuff
edit- No dupe links
- Image tags checked and OK