Talk:Drive (2011 film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aranea Mortem (talk • contribs • count) 15:38, 16 September 2011 (UTC)

• Firstly, this is going to need a plot. I'd probably suggest just watching the film and annotating it, but you can also get the gist of it from online sources, but don't copy/paste!

If schoolwork stops me from seeing it tonight, then I'll definitely see it Saturday night. I'm not really good at writing plot sections (I always make them verbose) so if I'm lucky another viewer will swoop in and do it for me

• "a contract has been put on him after a heist gone wrong" Unclear.

done

• You cite Chris Smith, Joe Pingue, Tina Huang and Jeff Wolfe as being in the cast, who do they play? Also Chris Smith needs disambiguation. Could you also give links to the other actors who don't have articles, redlinks are fine.

done for linking but I did remove some as they were extras (i.e. "waitress", caterer man in a tan suit). I could not even find Smith and Christian in the whole cast list....

• Minor: After "Platt Productions", there is a space before the ref. Also after "he says." (ref 8)

done

• I could have sworn the driver was a sociopath, he was clearly written to be socially awkward and mainly devoid of emotion. They seemed to put a lot of effort into displaying this in every scene. However nothing about this side of his character is mentioned. Nor is his (missing) past which is presumably bloody. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.216.114.180 (talk) 06:01, 28 September 2011 (UTC)

• "small but vital" Point of view?

put that in quotes per source from Cannes PDF file

• "he loved that Bernie is not cliched" Changes tense part-way through the sentence.

done

• There's a bit of overlinking going on: Jewish, thinking outside the box and mobster, gang member, edit, abandoned building, showroom, Scandinavian, European, movie critics.

done

• "They built from scratch, Gosling's character's apartment building" Awkward sentence.

fixed

• The first sentence of "Style" doesn't make sense to me.

done

• Red Dog is disambiguated incorrectly and is redlinked, the film article is found here.

done

• To Live and Die in L.A. and Typecasting need disambiguation.

done Crystal Clear x3 16:46, 16 September 2011 (UTC)

Hey there Crystal, everything checks out GA-wise, except the breadth due to a lacking plot section and a few other minor tweaks that are needed, once done, I'll pass it. Good luck, Aranea Mortem ^{(talk to me)} 15:38, 16 September 2011 (UTC)