Talk:Dora trial/GA1
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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 20:19, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 20:19, 30 March 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead:
- "Dora was the last of a sequence of proceedings which took place in the context of the Dachau Trials relating to wide-ranging war crimes uncovered by the United States in its zone of occupation at the end of World War II." ouch - very jargony - suggest "Dora was the last proceeding in a series known as the Dachau Trials which dealt with war crimes uncovered by the United States in its zone of occupation at the end of World War II."
- Okay, you say it was the last proceeding and then you say there were more after???
- "Violent crimes still extant in the the body of the facts resulted in several more trials of individual cases in both West Germany and East Germany." HUH? I think you mean "Other violent crimes committed at the camp later resulted in several more trials of individual cases in both West Germany and East Germany."?
Background:
- You used August 7, 1947 in the lead but 11 April 1945 in this section. Decide on a date format and be consistent.
- You link "SS-Totenkopfverbände" but can we put it in English - this is the English wikipedia after all, not German.
- Why is "Investigating Team 6822," in italics?
- Link for "U.S. War Crimes Program"?
- "Corresponding demands to the Soviet military administration remained mostly unanswered." Corresponding demands for what?? I do not parse this sentence at all.
- Cite for "Those Mittelbau-Dora suspects and evidence that were in U.S. custody were finally incorporated into the framework of the Dachau Trials."?
Legal basis:
- "German perpetrators of crimes on German victims remained long unpunished and were usually only later heard in German courts." ... do you mean "German perpetrators of crimes on German victims remained long unpunished and were usually only later tried in German courts."?
- Why is "Common Design" in italics?
Participants:
- What difference to the trial does the fact that "Aalmans produced a booklet entitled the "Dora"-Nordhausen Labor-Concentration Camps" have? It's totally unrelated to anything before or after .. it jars.
- What is GmbH?
- Is the gallery of defendants REALLY needed? It takes up an insane amount of space for little gain.
- "U.S." or "US"? Decide on one and be consistent.
Trial:
- Why is "evacuation of the camp" in scare quotes? You did this earlier...
Later Mittelbau:
- "violent crimes still extant in the body of facts resulted" jargon - you need to reword this to not be lawyer-speak
- I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 20:56, 30 March 2012 (UTC)