Talk:Don Gault/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Seabuckthorn in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 03:24, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply
Nominator: Wizardman

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly.   --Seabuckthorn  03:24, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

1: Well-written

Check for WP:LEAD:  

  1. Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:     Done
  2. Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):     Done
  3. Check for Introductory text:     Done
    • Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):     Done
      • Major Point 1: College career "Gault played college football at Hofstra University where he set many school passing records." (summarised well in the lead)  
      • Major Point 2: Professional career "After graduating, he was signed by the Browns. The team kept him on the roster from 1968 to 1972, though he was only an active player in 1970. He played in two games and started one, earning a victory despite a passer rating of zero. After the Browns released him in 1972, he had offseason stints with the San Diego Chargers, Edmonton Eskimos, New York Jets, and New York Stars before retiring." (summarised well in the lead)  
    • Check for Relative emphasis:     Done
      • Major Point 1: College career "Gault played college football at Hofstra University where he set many school passing records." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)  
      • Major Point 2: Professional career "After graduating, he was signed by the Browns. The team kept him on the roster from 1968 to 1972, though he was only an active player in 1970. He played in two games and started one, earning a victory despite a passer rating of zero. After the Browns released him in 1972, he had offseason stints with the San Diego Chargers, Edmonton Eskimos, New York Jets, and New York Stars before retiring." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)  
    • Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):     Done
      • Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):     Done
        • "Donald J. Gault (born August 30, 1946) is a former American football quarterback who played in the National Football League (NFL) with the Cleveland Browns in 1970."
      • Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):     Done
      • Check for Proper names and titles:     Done
      • Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN):   None
      • Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG):   None
      • Check for Pronunciation:   None
      • Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):     Done
      • Check for Biographies:     Done
      • Check for Organisms:   NA
  4. Check for Biographies of living persons:     Done
  5. Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):     Done
    • Check for Non-English titles:  
    • Check for Usage in first sentence:  
    • Check for Separate section usage:  
  6. Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):     Done
  7. Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER):   None
  Done

Check for WP:LAYOUT:     Done

  1. Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.     Done
    • Check for Headings and sections:     Done
    • Check for Section templates and summary style:     Done
    • Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):     Done
      • Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading. (WP:BETTER)
      • Fix the Personal life section.  
  2. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):     Done
    • Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):     Done
    • Check for Works or publications:     Done
    • Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO):     Done
    • Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):     Done
    • Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER):     Done
    • Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL):     Done
    • Check for Links to sister projects:     Done
    • Check for Navigation templates:     Done
  3. Check for Formatting:     Done
    • Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):     Done
    • Check for Links:     Done
    • Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):     Done
WP:WTW:  
  Done

Check for WP:WTW:     Done

  1. Check for Words that may introduce bias:     Done
    • Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):     Done
    • Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):     Done
    • Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):     Done
    • Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):     Done
    • Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):     Done
    • Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):     Done
  2. Check for Expressions that lack precision:     Done
    • Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):     Done
    • Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):     Done
    • Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):     Done
    • Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA):   None
  3. Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):     Done

Check for WP:MOSFICT:     Done

  1. Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):     Done
    • Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):     Done
    • Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):     Done
  Done


2: Verifiable with no original research

WP:RS:  
  Done

Check for WP:RS:     Done

Cross-checked with the other FAs: Art Houtteman, Orval Grove, Nick Adenhart, Scott Zolak, Harmon Killebrew, Rogers Hornsby, Thurman Tucker, Stan Coveleski & Bob Feller

  1. Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING):   (contentious)   Done
    • Is it contentious?:   Yes
    • Does the ref indeed support the material?:  
  2. Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):     Done
    • Who is the author?:  
    • Does the author have a Wikipedia article?:  
    • What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?:  
    • What else has the author published?:  
    • Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?:  
  3. Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):     Done
  4. Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):  
  Done

Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:     Done

  1. Check for Direct quotations:     Done
  2. Check for Likely to be challenged:     Done
  3. Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP):   NA
WP:NOR:  
  Done
  1. Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):     Done
  2. Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):     Done
  3. Check for original images (WP:OI):     Done


3: Broad in its coverage

  Done

Thorough check on Google in parallel with criteria 2. Cross-checked with the other FAs: Art Houtteman, Orval Grove, Nick Adenhart, Scott Zolak, Harmon Killebrew, Rogers Hornsby, Thurman Tucker, Stan Coveleski & Bob Feller

  1. Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources:  
    1. Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS:  
    2. Check for Out of scope:  
  2. Check for The range of material that belongs in the article:  
    1. Check for All material that is notable is covered:  
    2. Check for All material that is referenced is covered:  
    3. Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered:  
    4. Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge:  
    5. Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):  
b. Focused:  
  Done
  1. Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH):  
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4: Neutral

  Done

4. Fair representation without bias:     Done

  1. Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):     Done
  2. Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):     Done
  3. Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):     Done
  4. Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):     Done
  5. Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):     Done
  6. Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):     Done
  7. Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):     Done
  8. Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):     Done
  9. Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):     Done
  10. Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):     Done
  11. Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):     Done
  12. Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI):   None
  13. Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV):   None


5: Stable: No edit wars, etc:   Yes

6: Images (None)

Images:  
  Done

6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:     Done

  1. Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):     Done
  2. Check for copyright status:     Done
  3. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):     Done
  4. Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):     Done

6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:     Done

  1. Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):     Done
  2. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):     Done
  3. Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):     Done


I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article:

  • I think the layout needs to be fixed.

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. All the best,   --Seabuckthorn  12:01, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Do you have a suggestion where to put the personal life info? I hate having that section in articles myself so I'm entirely fine getting rid of it, I've just tried and failed in making it work inside the article without it seeming jarring (I was also hoping to find later info on him so I could just use it as a post-career section, but no luck there). Wizardman 14:25, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply
I guess it will go better if you remove it.   I'm usually reluctant when it comes to deleting any relevant content. But it's a BLP and his wife is not notable. Also, we are discouraged to include personal info in a BLP in order to ensure privacy. So I'd not prefer devoting a Heading 2 to personal life with a very short paragraph because it will stand out in the article, but if you find later info on him, please feel free to restore the content. That's the best advice I can give.   But really, I'm willing to rely on your experience as a reviewer.   --Seabuckthorn  16:02, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply
Fair enough, especially since there's nothing more recent on marriage or children, at best the source used is archaic. Removed that and merged the other note into his career. Wizardman 17:18, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply
Thanks   --Seabuckthorn  20:13, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Promoting the article to GA status.   --Seabuckthorn  20:13, 8 February 2014 (UTC)Reply