Talk:Dive Bar Tour (Lady Gaga)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GagaNutella (talk · contribs) 17:34, 6 March 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for your review! :) I’ve addressed all your notes. Sricsi (talk) 09:56, 7 March 2023 (UTC)

Infobox/Lead

• Add a comma after previous tours

Background and development

• Gaga aimed to be close enough to her audience so that she can look into their eyes while performing, → Gaga aimed to be close enough to her audience to be able to look into their eyes while performing,
• The "Prior the tour" part, change will for would

Concert synopsis

• Remove the comma after sat down
• who served as co-executive producer for Joanne. → who served as Joanne's co-executive producer.
• telling the audience how they wrote the following song "Grigio Girls" together, which Gaga → telling the public how they wrote the following song, "Grigio Girls", together,
• and was present in the audience. → and was present there.
• "Million Reasons" and "Just Another Day" was performed → "Million Reasons" and "Just Another Day" were performed
• where she reprised "Joanne" and performed → where she reprised "Joanne" and sang
• Gaga debuted new song → Gaga debuted the new song
• the track "Million Reasons", and performed the song. → the track "Million Reasons" and performed it.
• she sang "Angel Down", and changed up the lyrics to reference → she sang "Angel Down" and changed its lyrics to reference
• Talking about her family led to a performance of the track "Joanne". → Talking about her family led to a performance of "Joanne".
• Before performing the final song, → Before singing the final song,
• Remove the comma after crowd-surfed

Critical reception

• and while she believed that → while believing that

Shows

• Wikilink United States

References

• Copy violation score looks good at 37.9%
• Ref 20: add |url-access= parameter

Final comments and verdict

I think this is it.  On hold until all of the issues are fixed.

✓ Pass now. GagaNutella^talk 13:10, 7 March 2023 (UTC)

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