Talk:Direct grant grammar school/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by Aiken drum in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Aiken ♫ 14:03, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
Very nice work! Some minor points before I can promote:
- Lead
- Is there a good picture to put in the lead? There's some nice pics below, I'm assuming there must be one.
- Origins
- "Secondary schools controlled by voluntary bodies could receive grant..." Should it not be 'a grant' or 'grants'?
- Local Education Authority or Local Authority? Capitalised or not?
- What's a "Circular 1381"?
- Direct Grant Scheme
- What's LEA? (I know really, but the reader might not)
- Direct grant school or direct grant grammar school?
- Characteristics of the schools
- "Their results were certainly impressive..." POV?
That's all, placing on hold. Aiken ♫ 15:09, 29 August 2010 (UTC)
Many thanks for your work on reviewing this. In response to your comments:
- Is there a good picture to put in the lead? There's some nice pics below, I'm assuming there must be one.
- I've moved the Manchester Grammar image to the lead. It's not the prettiest, but it is the school always mentioned as an example of the type. Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- Good idea. Aiken Drum 15:47, 6 September 2010 (UTC)
- "Secondary schools controlled by voluntary bodies could receive grant..." Should it not be 'a grant' or 'grants'?
- changed to 'a grant' Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- Local Education Authority or Local Authority? Capitalised or not?
- The sources use both terms, but LEA more after the 1944 Act. I've changed Local Authority to lower case. Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- What's a "Circular 1381"?
- Expanded a little to explain Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- What's LEA? (I know really, but the reader might not)
- The abbreviation is now introduced in the Origins section. Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- Direct grant school or direct grant grammar school?
- The terms are used interchangeably in the sources, and I found it cumbersome to use the full form everywhere. Also the full form would be anachronistic before 1944. Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- "Their results were certainly impressive..." POV?
- "impressive" was Donnison's word, but I've replaced it. Kanguole 23:37, 5 September 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks - this now meets criteria. Aiken Drum 15:47, 6 September 2010 (UTC)