Talk:Desperate Housewives season 3/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 21:36, 26 June 2012 (UTC)

Will review this one soon. Ruby 2010/2013 21:36, 26 June 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• Initial comment: there is one deadlink. Will complete further review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 21:38, 26 June 2012 (UTC)

• You give undue weight to the clip show in the lead (it takes up 1/4 of it). Recommend you trim this, and add to the rest with other content from the article body. As I voiced in the season 2 GA review, you easily have enough to fill 3 or 4 paragraphs (plot, production, more from reception etc). You definitely need to mention that the plot advanced forward 6 months, for instance
• Also, there is no mention of the clip shows in the article body. See WP:LEAD
• The "disaster episode" seems out of place in the lead; suggest reorganizing
• ABC linked twice in lead
• "Buena Vista Home Entertainment released officially released the season on DVD in the United States and Canada on September 4, 2007." - released is seen twice
• "Michael Edelstein and Tom Spezialy, who served as executive producers for seasons one and two, did not return for the series' third season due to creative differences.[3][4][5] They were replaced by Kevin Murphy and George W. Perkins, both of whom had previously served as co-executive producers in earlier seasons.[6]" I assume by this that co-executive producer is below an executive producer (i.e. they don't mean the same thing)?
• Link to Orson Hodge and Kyle MacLachlan the first time you mention him in production section; same with the other actors. Then, make sure to unlink those actors in the following casting section
• No references for two paragraphs in casting section? The "star billing" parts at least need citations
• How have Edie's short-term relationships made her an iconic character? I don't understand this.
• "Andrea Bowen acted as Julie Mayer, the responsible and caring daughter of Susan, whose close relationship to her mother have made her more mature" - Have made who more mature? Julie or Susan?
• "...which started that illadvised business in the basement ..." - is "illadvised" a typo on your part, or the writer's?
• No need link to Listen to the Rain on the Roof because you already have earlier. Also, I think this is the first time you mention the full premiere title. I had to click on it to understand what you were talking about.
• As far as I can tell, the reception section only discusses the premiere! Considering the season was 23 episodes, this is a problem
• "The season eceived critical acclaim"
• Awards and nominations section is entirely unsourced and is too large for one paragraph - cite and break down into smaller ones. Also, WP:OVERLINK is a problem here
• This link doesn't work. I was going to verify that it states there were "numerous fan complaints," as I doubted that was in the source given
• Again, WP:OVERLINK is a problem in ratings section - be careful
• Home video release - first paragraph missing citations
• Reference 1 is improperly formatted

My first instinct was to fail the article, but I will place it on hold for seven days if you feel you can get it improved by then. I can tell you are passionate about this subject, and we can always use more of that on Wikipedia! Please leave notes here upon completing each suggestion. Thank you. Ruby 2010/2013 17:57, 28 June 2012 (UTC)

It has been eight days, and the nominator (who has been actively editing elsewhere during this period) has not made any response. I am thus failing the article. Ruby 2010/2013 16:31, 6 July 2012 (UTC)