Talk:Deliver (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 20:07, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• I'll take this one on tonight. Courcelles (talk) 20:07, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• Look where those Whitney Phillips link in the lede, infobox, and first body paragraph (others?) go and check that's what you want.

• Removed link. Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• Should you mention in "Jeremy Reeves, Jonathan Yip, Ray McCullough, and Ray Romulos played the instruments." that those three are The Stereotypes?

• Clarified. Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• "Lauren Jauregui identified it as "a song from the album that best shows off its R&B moments", and compared it to music released by Destiny's Child. Discussing the single's composition, she said: "The melodies are crazy and the concept is awesome. It bounces, and it’s super clever. Definitely one of my favourites on the album."[8] Ally Brooke spoke positively of the composition, citing it as "almost a creative chaos", and Normani said that "Deliver" reminded her of "Endless Love" from the group's debut album Reflection (2015).[1] Brooke compared "Deliver" to music released by Motown, and described its sound as a "kind of funky, jazz, R&B soul".[13]" Should be pointed out these aren't critics, but are the group's members.

• I think it would be rather obvious for the links. I am not sure how to clarify this in the prose without putting "Fifth Harmony group member" in front of each of the names and it would be rather clunky/awkward. I am open to suggestions though! Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• You're right, it is obvious form the links, and I suspose most people who end up here will know what Fifth Harmony is (unlike, say, yours truly an hour ago!) Courcelles (talk)

• No worries. I honestly know very little about Fifth Harmony myself, and primarily took up this article to try and do something outside of my area of knowledge so I can completely understand your point lol. Aoba47 (talk) 20:47, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• Tedious, I know, but we need a citation after " Dinah Jane said: "It’s the kinda song for when you’re getting down with your man.""

• The quote is supported through the citation in the follow sentence (i.e. citation 14). Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• Still, it's one of the very few explicit rules of GA, quotes get cited immediately afterwards. Courcelles (talk) 20:45, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• I have heard of this rule before, but I have made the revision. Thank you for the note! Aoba47 (talk) 20:48, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• "AXS' Lucas Villa AXS responded" Something isn't right here using AXS twice. And who was he "responding" to?

• He was "responding positively" to the song. I have removed the second instance of AXS. Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• Otherwise, looks to be of good quality. Courcelles (talk) 20:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• @Courcelles: Thank you for the review! I believe that I have responded to everything. Please let me know if anything else needs to be improved. Aoba47 (talk) 20:42, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

• NOting for the record I checked the two pieces of NFC in the article and find both in compliance with WP:NFCC. Courcelles (talk)

• Promoting. Courcelles (talk) 20:50, 19 April 2018 (UTC)