Talk:Dead Putting Society/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Flash ^{talk} 18:50, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Hey. I saw this at GAN and thought I'd review it (as part of my little mission to clear some of the backlog) See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for how I perform GARs. Let's get started! The Flash ^{talk} 18:50, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• "[...]makes a bet with Ned that the father of boy[...]" -> "the father of the boy"
  •  Done Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Plot

• "Beautiful" sounds a bit un-POV. Can you find a neutral synonym?
  •  Done Removed the word since it didn't seem necessary. Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
• Please mention that they enter the tournament.
  •  Done Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Production

• "[...]based much of golf-related scenes in the script" -> "of the golf-related scenes"
  •  Done Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
• Wikilink to straight man (double act)
  •  Done Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Reception

• Could you make ratings its own paragraph? I know it's rather short, but it looks like it could easily work on its own.
  •  Done Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Images

• What do you think about something like this to illustrate the mechanics of a golf swing the episode talks about? Understood if you don't agree with a FU image being used on the article, though.
  • That image doesn't really show the actual swing (a video would be required), so I'd prefer not to use it. Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
• The sole image looks fine.

• Wow, thank you for reviewing the article so quickly. I really appreciate it. :) By the way, I think the plot section needs to be shortened a bit so please hold the review until I'm done with that. Theleftorium 19:15, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
  • I've trimmed to the plot section now. Theleftorium 19:28, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

• No problem. And thank you for shortening the plot.

Final say

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Great job. I've gone ahead and passed the article. Cheers, The Flash ^{talk} 01:07, 11 January 2010 (UTC)