Talk:Dead Island Reveal Trailer/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:13, 2 August 2016 (UTC)Reply


Mine. JAGUAR  20:13, 2 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • The lead would be better off being merged into two paragraphs
    • "The team also had the goal to show the inevitability and the helplessness of a family in a zombie outbreak" - the development team
  • "The trailer was produced by Scotland-based Axis Animation" - the article says Glascow, so it should be Glascow-based Axis
  • "and the community reaction led Techland" - de-link Techland here
  • "immersion and tone, but it received criticism" - however
  • "According to Techland, it is a game about killing zombies, not a game focused on delivering an emotional experience" - this sounds like it's still anticipating the game, but it was released in 2011. I'd change it to past-tense
  • "The team worried that the action and violence featured would seem excessive" - was worried. Also, can this paragraph be merged into another? It's choppy
  • There's a citation needed tag in the Reception section
  • "Keith Stuart from The Guardian compared it favourably" - does this article use American or British English? Should be consistent
  • Rename "Plot of the trailer" to just "Plot"
  • No dead links
  • Dab links OK

Quite decent. On hold until all are addressed.   JAGUAR  20:21, 2 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

@Jaguar: Thank you for the review! I have fixed the issues mentioned above. AdrianGamer (talk) 03:35, 3 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thanks! This is good to go now.   JAGUAR  13:13, 3 August 2016 (UTC)Reply