Talk:Dances with Smurfs/GA1
Latest comment: 14 years ago by SuperFlash101 in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: The Flash {talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
Yello! I saw this episode when it aired and I was cracking up the whole way through, so I was excited to see it at GAN. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my structural set up. Let's get started, The Flash {talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
Lead
edit- Is there any source for its UK airdate?
- I couldn't find one; that was there before i worked on the page. I've removed it. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- "[...]a platform for politically charges accusations against[...]" -> can you clean this up?
- Done. Better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- Can you either expand the second paragraph or combine it with the third one?
- I've expanded that second paragraph a bit, but if you think it's no good, feel free to drop that new sentence and combine the two paragraphs instead. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
Plot summary
edit- "Cartman starts projecting his announcements into television screens classroom[...]" -> "television screens classroom"?
- Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- Shouldn't Cartman's book be italicized?
- Done. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- Please add a period after "Dances with Smurfs"
- Can you reword the whole Avatar part? It makes it seem like James Cameron adapted the film, not the book.
- Is this better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
Theme
edit- Can you add an image of Beck?
- You got it. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- "[...]writes on a blackboard to demonstrate to make a political point[...]" -> try and clean that up a bit
- Is this better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- "[...]and that he particularly enjoys Cartman's hair[...]" -> "particularly enjoyed"
Cultural references
edit- Delink to Avatar and James Cameron (already linked in summary)
- Done. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- "[...]expresses anger that they stole his idea, expressing the idea that[...]" -> can you reword that so it isn't back-to-back "expresses"
- Done. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- Delink Smurfs (same as above)
- Can you merge the second and first paragraphs? It seems a little abrupt as is.
- No problem. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
Reception
edit- Can you split it up into two or more paragraphs?
- I split the ratings info and reviews info into two paragraphs. The ratings one is a bit short, but I think this is the most natural way to do it. — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- Remove the "the" before Nielsen Ratings
Images
edit- File:Cartmanchalk.jpg has a fine FU rationale, but needs to be of lower resolution.
- Better? — Hunter Kahn 00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
Final say
edit- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Excellent work!! I'm going to pass this article. Cheers, The Flash {talk} 01:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: