Talk:Cyclone Dumazile/GA1

GA Review

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LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 14:21, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

This article is extremely well-written. However, I did find a handful of minor issues. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 14:21, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Lead

• and was named Dumazile the next day as it intensified into a tropical storm. Add a comma after "the next day".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• and in the case of Saint-Gilles was clogged by debris Add a comma after "Saint-Gilles".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• and some flooding occurred in Toamasina as a result of malfunctioning drainage systems after Cyclone Ava in January. Add a comma after "Toamasina".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• Link thunderstorm.

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• and MFR reported that Change "MFR" to "the MFR". Do this for each instance of this usage throughout the article. (I found 9 such cases in the MH section.)

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• The incipient disturbance underwent a small clockwise loop over the rest of 2 March amid opposing steering flows from the north and south. Add a comma after "2 March".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• MFR noted the surrounding atmospheric environment See the above (second point for this section). Change "MFR" to "the MFR".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• The JTWC stated that the system had become a tropical storm at 12:00 UTC on 2 March as it began producing 1-minute sustained winds of 65 km/h (40 mph). Add a comma after "2 March".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• MFR also upgraded the system to a tropical storm 00:00 UTC on 3 March based on scatterometer data, There are a few issues here. Change "MFR" to "The MFR". Also add "at" after "tropical storm", and add a comma after "3 March".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• Modest strengthening ensued on 3 March as Dumazile began to move southwestwards in response to a developing ridge to its east. Change "southwestwards" to "southwestward". Also add a comma after "southwestward".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• Quicker intensification I won't make this a requirement, but I would suggest changing "quicker" to "faster".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• began on 4 March as the inner core began to tighten up and the radius of maximum wind decreased, Add a comma after "4 March".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• with MFR upgrading Dumazile to a severe tropical storm by 06:00 UTC. Change "MFR" to "the MFR".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• leading MFR to assess that Same as the above.

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• An eye became increasingly apparent as Dumazile turned south-southeastwards while rounding the periphery of the ridge to its east, coinciding with significant strengthening through the morning of 5 March. Change "south-southeastwards" to "south-southeastward", and also add a comma after "south-southeastward".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• By 12:00 UTC, Dumazile reached its peak intensity as an intense tropical cyclone with 10-minute sustained winds of 165 km/h (105 mph), gusts up to 230 km/h (145 mph), and a minimum pressure of 945 hPa (27.91 inHg), as estimated by MFR; Add a comma after "intense tropical cyclone". Also change "MFR" to "the MFR".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• the northwest part of the circulation Change "northwest" to "northwestern".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• as weakening began almost immediately with an increase in northwesterly wind shear over the system associated with an upper-level trough. Add a comma after "immediately".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• leading MFR to declare Dumazile became post-tropical by 00:00 UTC on 7 March. Change "MFR" to "the MFR". Also link "post-tropical" to post-tropical cyclone.

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• Link "subtropical storm" to subtropical cyclone.
• Extratropical transition began later on 7 March while Dumazile accelerated southeastwards into the midlatitude westerlies. Add a comma after "7 March". Also change "southeastwards" to "southeastward".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• while MFR continued to monitor Dumazile Change "MFR" to "the MFR".

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

• The remnant system was last noted by MFR a day later. Same as the above.

• Done. Noah^Talk 21:28, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Preparations, impact, and aftermath

• with the exception of several in Saint-Paul and Saint-Leu where roadways were still blocked. Add a comma after "Saint-Leu".
• The Volcanic highway, Capitalize "Volcanic Highway".
• The Saint-Gilles port had to be unblocked after the storm due to debris and damage left behind. Add a comma after "the storm".
• Change "cutoff" to "cut off".
• Strong waves submerged four lanes of the coastal highway with seawater and 150 mm (5.9 in) of rain fell on a cliff overlooking the road. Add a comma after "seawater".
• Numerous bridges were either swept away or submerged by floodwaters and several roads were flooded across Cilaos and Salazie. Add a comma after "floodwaters".
• The RN5 highway was impassable for months at Îlet Furçy after several landslides occurred during cyclones Ava, Berguitta, and Dumazile. Add a comma after "Îlet Furçy}.
• Link esplanade.
• Access to the beach was prohibited from 19 March–6 April as a precautionary measure to prevent injuries. Add a comma after "6 April".
• Repair work on the Cilaos bridge was halted due to severe conditions during the storm. Add a comma after "halted".
• Residents erected a temporary bridge using ladders in order to rescue 400 marooned people elsewhere in Cilaos and another 100 on a beach near Îlet Furçy. Add a comma after "ladders".
• Landslides occurred in two neighborhoods of Brittany and a wall collapsed in the mountain region. Add a comma after "Brittany". Also change "mountain" to "mountainous".
• A large lake developed on the Plaine des Cafres due to heavy rainfall. Add a comma after "Plaine des Cafres".
• A trail from Bois Court and Grand Bassin was closed due to damage sustained during cyclones Berguitta and Dumazile. Add a comma after "was closed".
• Link Salazie.
• The Dos d'Ane–Deux Bras hiking trail reopened on 17 July after suffering damage during cyclones Berguitta, Dumazile, and Fakir. Add a comma after "17 July".
• Link severe weather.
• and Sofia and the Farafangana, Nosy Varika, Manakara, Mananjary, and Vohipeno districts. Change "Sofia and the Farafangana" to "Sofia, as well as the Farafangana".
• Portions of Toamasina flooded during the storm as a result of malfunctioning drainage systems that were damaged during Cyclone Ava. Add a comma after "during the storm".

• Did the rest. Noah^Talk 21:40, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Copyvio check

• I ran the article through Earwig's Copyvio Detection Tool. The tool did not find any matches (0.0%), and I didn't see anything that looked like a potential copyvio, either.

Source review

• No issues here.

Final

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   I am going to ✓ Pass this article. Congratulations! LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 21:42, 3 July 2021 (UTC)