Talk:Cultural depictions of tuberculosis/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Airborne84 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Airborne84 (talk · contribs) 02:07, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Starting review. --Airborne84 (talk) 02:07, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:40, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
Haven't made it through yet. Will finish initial look tomorrow. No copyright issues with the images that I can see. Some images appear to be missing some info, but appear to be used in a number of other places and have been around for a while.
Noted.
Making a few copyedits; trying not to make changes based on stylistic preferences, but have been trimming words when it is possible, added a couple of topic sentences, and split at least one long sentence for easier digestion.
Those are fine, thanks.
The sentence with the words "two sopranos and piano", is pretty long and that wording specifically is confusing. I recommend a rewording for clarity. --Airborne84 (talk) 02:55, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
Done.
As a side note, and I'll just note for the record, my first thought was to consider whether the subject of the article itself was notable. However, (1) this subject has been discussed and recorded on the article's talk page, and (2) there appear to be plenty of similar articles on Wikipedia, so I'm OK with it. --Airborne84 (talk) 03:03, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
Noted. We're not short of reliable sources. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:40, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Almost done. Will review sources and relook one more time. Appears to be GA quality. My only concern is the last section. I see the hidden text in the Wiki markup discussing unsourced anime and manga examples. But the only sourced example in the article seems to be manga (after checking the source). If an anime example can't be sourced via WP:RS, think the anime wording should be removed from that section and the sentence I added in the lede. Another possible improvement would be sourcing modern examples in that section to be able to add the "contemporary" influence in those fields. That would ensure the article is "broad in its coverage" by taking it up to present day, since the manga example is from his early days—apparently the mid-20th century. --Airborne84 (talk) 17:08, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

That domain is mainly populated with forums, blogs and chatrooms. However, I have found and added a RS for "anime and manga". It says there are few recent stories that feature TB (not surprising given that TB is now rare in Japan), though some set "in earlier times" did; recent examples either don't exist or aren't reliably cited anywhere. I've put a quote in the ref just for safety. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:53, 4 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the responsiveness. I've completed the review and find that it meets the six Good Article criterions, and meets the standard to be one of Wikipedia's Good Articles. Thank you for your contribution and happy writing! --Airborne84 (talk) 00:25, 5 March 2018 (UTC)Reply