Talk:Crest (heraldry)/GA1
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 10:05, 4 August 2015 (UTC)
Hi, I'm Calvin999, and I'm reviewing this nomination.
- One suspicious link
- The lead is far too short given the reasonable length of the article as a whole. The lead should be an overview.
- Place a {{Clear}} after "crests are now solely symbolic." so that the picture doesn't interfere with the prose below.
- Is that the correct way to spell mediaeval? I'd like it to Middle Ages
- of the helm, → Do you mean helmet?
- crest to the helm, → Same here
- a particularly absurd example → Too informal and not very encyclopaedic
- disembodied hand → dismembered, perhaps?
- issuing from clouds → What is being issued?
- I think the pictures are causing a bit of distraction and interfering with the sections. They are quite large and some face each other or overlap. I'd recommend perhaps using one or two in the main body of prose, and then having a gallery of images at the end of the article. Because at the moment, it feels quite cluttered.
- Also, none of the images should being forced to a particular size.
- Outcome
On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 16:02, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
Response
edit1. Sorry, I don't understand how this link is suspicious. It works fine for me.
- It doesn't open for me. — Calvin999
- I've linked to another archival of the book. You should find it works now. Zacwill16 (talk) 19:44, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
2. I've expanded the lead somewhat.
3. Done (though I don't see how this helps?).
- It stops it from overlapping into the section below.
4. The spelling "mediaeval" is generally preferred in British English, as opposed to the American "medieval"; I've linked the word to Middle Ages.
- Ah okay I didn't know that is the British English. — Calvin999
5. "Helm" and "helmet" are synonyms, but the former term is generally preferred in heraldry, e.g. George Eve uses "helm".
- I wouldn't have known that, and I don't think the general reader would either. — Calvin999
- I've added a Wiktionary link. Zacwill16 (talk) 19:44, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
6. See above.
7. Resolved.
8. I think "disembodied" is a better term in this context; "dismembered" suggests that the hand has been ripped off from the arm.
9. The hand is the thing issuing from the clouds; I thought the text made that clear.
10. I have removed a couple of the images.
- You can keep them, I just think a gallery for readers to look at would be better than having them all clutter the sections above. You can do a gallery like on Gallery of passport stamps by country or territory. — Calvin999
11. Can I ask why? If the images are allowed to remain their default sizes, then some of them end up so small that the details can't be made out.
- If it would render them too small to view then keep them larger. — Calvin999
–Zacwill16 (talk) 17:57, 9 August 2015 (UTC)
Passing. — Calvin999 10:58, 11 August 2015 (UTC)