Talk:Corry Tendeloo/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Vacant0 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 12:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hi! I will review this article due to the ongoing GAN backlog. I will start the review soon. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 12:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

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  • Change the short description: "20th-century Dutch politician who fought for equal rights for women" → "Dutch lawyer, feminist, and politician (1897–1956)
  • Change the picture alt: "A black and white photograph of a woman" → "A black and white photograph of Corry Tendeloo"
  • Caption can be changed to just "Tendeloo in 1926"
  • Remove the parliamentarygroup parameters. I've never seen this being implemented in any article. My recommendation is to switch to the party parameter.
→ | party = {{ubl|[[Free-thinking Democratic League|VDB]] (until 1946)|[[Labour Party (Netherlands)|PvdA]] (after 1946)}}
  • Remove the spouse parameter too.
  • Add a comma here: "Born in the Dutch East Indies Tendeloo..." → Born in the Dutch East Indies, Tendeloo...
  • Fix typo: tme → time
  • Add another comma here: "In the 1930s she..." → In the 1930s, she...
  • "on the Amsterdam City Council" → in the Amsterdam City Council
  • Change the link for Suriname and Curacao since we are talking about 1948. Suriname → Surinam (Dutch colony), Curaçao → Curaçao and Dependencies.
  • And another one: "In early 1955 she..." → In early 1955, she...
  • Another one: "In 1919 she began..." → In 1919, she began...
  • Remove accidental addition: "{" at the end of the "...in the Dutch Women's Council" sentence.
  • Again: "In 1924 Tendeloo joined a law firm and in 1927 she began..." → In 1924, Tendeloo joined a law firm and in 1927, she began...
  • Missing point at the end of the "Through their existence, they intended to affect change over three stages: from awareness to legal equality to practical equality" sentence.
  • Remove automatically from the "...in 1946 she automatically became a member..." sentence. It is not needed.
  • Capitalize COVID in the "Covid-19".
  • More addition of commas after years.
  • Copyvios unlikely.

Images

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  • All alright.

Sources

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  • All are alright, reliable and verifiable.

@Edwininlondon: On hold until these issues get fixed. --Vacant0 (talk) 17:30, 6 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

@Vacant0: Thanks very much for your review. Much appreciated you taking the time. I believe I have addressed all your points, including extra commas after years. Edwininlondon (talk) 08:54, 7 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
Good job. Promoting. Vacant0 (talk) 11:24, 7 January 2022 (UTC)Reply