Talk:Come Out and Play (Billie Eilish song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 07:53, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Will review this today; just remember, check you have done all of my points before marking them as done. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:53, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Cover art needs alt text
• Remove target to Billie Eilish under Songwriter(s)
• Add a ref that supports the lowercase stylization; maybe write this out in the body somewhere?

Kyle Peake I cannot find any source for this.

DarklyShadows The NME ref 12 works and remember to sign posts off like this --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:20, 2 July 2020 (UTC)

• "The song was released" → "The song was released for digital download and streaming as a single" with the appropriate targets
• Writing/production belongs as the second sentence instead
• "who also produced the track" → "with the latter solely handling production"
• Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
• "Eilish's lyrics on the song" → "Eilish's lyrics within the song"
• "including Eilish trying" → "including her attempting" to be less repetitive
• "The track was released alongside" → "The song was released alongside"
• "for which it provides the soundtrack" → "which it is used as the soundtrack for"
• "The song received" → ""Come Out and Play" received"
• "It charted in various countries including" → "The song charted in various countries, including"
• "the United Kingdom and reached" → "the United Kingdom, and reached"
• "The song was later included on the Japan" → "It was later included on the Japanese"
• "of her debut studio album" → "of Eilish's debut studio album,"
• "along with "When I Was Older"" → "along with her single "When I Was Older"." with the appropriate wikilink
• Remove the compilation album sentence as this is irrelevant to the article
• Spacing issues between the lead and the first section

 Done

Background and composition

• "Eilish and her brother were approached by Apple, who sent them" → "Eilish and her brother Finneas O'Connell were approached by Apple, with the company sending them" with the wikilink and target
• "early version a festive commercial" → "early version of a festive commercial" with the target
• "of the advert. It was recorded in their" → "of the advert, recording it in their"
• Mention that the premiere was on November 20, 2018
• "through record labels" → "through the record labels"
• "on November 20, 2018" → "on the same day"
• "as a standalone single" → "as a single" with the target
• Mention when the edition was released
• "the singer and her brother Finneas O'Connell, and he also" → "the singer and O'Connell, and he"
• "by studio personnel, John Greenham" → "by the studio personnel John Greenham"
• Paragraphs 2 and 3 should be in a separate section titled Composition and lyrics; the first section of para 1 should be titled Background and recording
• "According to sheet music website Musicnotes.com," → "According to Musicnotes.com,"
• Wikilink tempo to itself
• Remove wikilink on beats per minute
• "the notes of G₃ and A_$" → "the notes of G₄ and A_$"
• "said the song has" → "said the song features"
• "in it's instrumentation" → "in its instrumentation"
• The Michigan Daily is an unreliable source since it's a student newspaper
• "Eilish states:" → "Eilish stated:"
• Remove targets on Apple and commercial
• "the song is used, entitled "Share Your Gifts"." → "the song is used."
• "Eilish encourages someone" → "She encourages someone"
• "and overcome their fears:" → "and overcome fears:"
• "mentions that Eilish's vocals" → "mentioned that Eilish's vocals"

 Done

Reception and promotion

• The Apple info belongs after the critical and commercial reception
• Why is this touted as a music video when it's supposed to be for a soundtrack of the commercial? Keep the info but fix wording
• "In it, people are scared" → "In the video, the characters are scared"
• "come out show their talents to the world" → "show their talents to the world"
• "as Eilish sings lyrics" → "while Eilish sings lyrics"
• Remove target on music critics
• "and he wouldn't be" → "and said he would not be"
• Try to replace The Michigan Daily review with another, since the song received adequate coverage
• ""Come Out and Play" debuted at number 69" → "The song debuted at number 69"
• Target to Billboard Hot 100 should be on Billboard Hot 100
• "The song also charted in" → "The song further charted in"
• If these are sorted alphabetically, put the Netherlands inbetween Latvia and Sweden
• Mention what the certification of 80,000 denotes, indicates, or whatever the correct wording is in this context

 Done

Credits and personnel

• Good

Charts

• Good

Certifications

• Good

References

• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Copyvio score is too high at 48.7%; fix the Insider ref

user:Kyle Peake Can I ask what you mean by this?

DarklyShadows Reduce the amount of direct quoting from the ref --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:20, 2 July 2020 (UTC)

• Change Variance Magazine to Variance on ref 3 but keep the target
• Cite various iTunes Stores for ref 4 to verify it was more than one country and put the retailer in brackets; (US), for example
• Cite musicjapanet as publisher instead for ref 5
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 9
• Ref 11 is from an unreliable source as I mentioned
• Ref 27 is a duplicate of ref 21
• Billie Eilish: Chart History - Alternative Digital Song Sales → Billie Eilish Chart History (Alternative Digital Song Sales) on ref 33
• Billie Eilish: Chart History - Pop Digital Song Sales → Billie Eilish Chart History (Pop Digital Song Sales) on ref 34

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold even though a lot of the criteria points are currently not met, you aren't too far off on them. --Kyle Peake (talk) 12:08, 1 July 2020 (UTC)
• Hot New Hip Hop → reliable source, should be added. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:32, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake I have done all of your requests. Let me know if there is anything else I need to do. DarklyShadows (talk) 21:52, 2 July 2020 (UTC)

@DarklyShadows: I have done some copyediting, but you still need to add than HNHH ref and also I have noticed MOS:QWQ issues with the Musicnotes.com ref that need fixing. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:27, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake I have added that to the reception area and fixed the MOS:QWQ problem. DarklyShadows (talk) 06:29, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

DarklyShadows Just remembered you still have not run Fix dead links on the article for archiving. --Kyle Peake (talk) 06:30, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake  Done DarklyShadows (talk) 06:31, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

DarklyShadows It appears you forgot to do this; I am assuming good faith as you may not remember how to use the tool, done for you. ✓ Pass on the article now, move discussion may be going on but that doesn't mean the article itself lacks stability, since no one is editing the content at all. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:16, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Shoot I thought the fix dead links was in the history section. My mistake. DarklyShadows (talk) 07:20, 3 July 2020 (UTC)