Talk:Balloon boy hoax/GA1

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Hello. I will review this article.

I'm concerned about the article's stability as required in WP:GACR. This article covers a recent event and is most likely going to have several major revisions in the future. That is my major concern and should be addressed; my other concerns will be listed below. --Edge3 (talk) 22:54, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

• Please resolve the "citation needed" tags. --Edge3 (talk) 23:15, 21 October 2009 (UTC)
• "...the producer of Wife Swap said that a show involving the Heenes had been in development, but that the deal was now off" - When was the deal called off?--Edge3 (talk) 23:20, 21 October 2009 (UTC)
• I found this on flickr: [1]. This picture would be great in the article, but GACR doesn't require you to add it. --Edge3 (talk) 23:33, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

• No, that's pretty obviously a copyright violation and should not be added. All of the photographer's other photos are of Chicago. Calliopejen1 (talk) 12:35, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

• "it was reported that an object had detached from the balloon and fallen to the ground" - not supported by source --Edge3 (talk) 00:11, 22 October 2009 (UTC)
• "He also stated that, once "the high voltage timer" was switched on, the balloon "would emit one million volts every five minutes for one minute"[22] in order to "move left and right — horizontal" [23]" - Please check sourcing for this sentence; I don't thunk the information is properly cited. Also, please add a period at the end. --Edge3 (talk) 01:19, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Please clarify - the CNN interview gives the timer and the minute long duration, the 911 call gives the purpose (horizontal motion) - cheers --Jaymax (talk) 06:30, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

I couldn't find the info anywhere in the CNN interview transcript. (the 911 call is fine) Could you please tell me where it is?--Edge3 (talk) 21:36, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

About 1/3rd way through: "Well, as we were inflating it, they were holding it to make sure, you know, it didn't get too windy. But after we had inflated it to a particular level, I went to go turn the high voltage timer on -- it's an egg timer. And it would -- it would emit one million volts every five minutes for one minute. But I thought -- I could have sworn he was standing right next to me. But I went to go pull the release lever..." —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jaymax (talk • contribs) 04:14, 23 October 2009 (UTC)

• "Helium's lift capacity is equal to the difference between its density (0.1786 kg/m3 at STP) and that of air, about 1.0214 kg/m3 (1 ounce per cubic foot) at sea level at 32° Fahrenheit, 0° C..." - cite please --Edge3 (talk) 01:57, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Tidied up a bit - okay now? --Jaymax (talk) 06:32, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Yes--Edge3 (talk) 21:39, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

• "Fort Collins is at an elevation of about 5,000 feet" - Please cite. --Edge3 (talk) 02:24, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

It's from the wikilinked Fort Collins--Jaymax (talk) 04:51, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Ok--Edge3 (talk) 21:39, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

• The "Search for Falcon Heene" can be renamed into a more general "Incident" section
• Try to keep the details more organized and in chronological order. For example:
  • "The balloon drifted for 60 miles (97 km), passing through Adams County and Weld County, and then it landed 90 minutes later near Keenesburg, 12 miles (19 km) northeast of Denver International Airport. Planes were rerouted around the balloon's flight path, and Denver International Airport was briefly shut down." - This can go to the Incident section mentioned above.
  • The entire paragraph beginning with "Larimer County sheriff's officials consulted a Colorado State University physics professor..." can go to the "Hoax allegations and criminal investigation" section--Edge3 (talk) 03:47, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

 Done Moved these. Is that 90 mins accurate? --Jaymax (talk) 04:51, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

Yes, I just saw it in one of the sources. --Edge3 (talk) 22:27, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

• Ref 30 is only a link. Please add full citation. --Edge3 (talk) 22:12, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

•  Done--TParis00ap (talk) 22:50, 22 October 2009 (UTC)

• "When the balloon finally landed, having been tracked by helicopters, the boy was not found inside the balloon. Officials expressed concern that he may have fallen out during flight. Although it was reported that it did not appear breached" - Not supported by source. --Edge3 (talk) 22:27, 22 October 2009 (UTC)
• "but county sheriff Jim Alderden later said, "For all we know he may have been two blocks down the road playing on the swing in the city park." - Cite please. --Edge3 (talk) 22:42, 22 October 2009 (UTC)
• "Margie Martinez of the Weld County Sheriff's Office said that the door was unlocked in the balloon. A sheriff deputy reported seeing something fall from the balloon near Platteville, Colorado" - Not supported by source--Edge3 (talk) 00:32, 23 October 2009 (UTC)
• "The charges had not yet been released to the public. The sheriff confirmed that making a false report to authorities would result in Class 3 misdemeanor charges and expressed that this charge "hardly seems serious enough given the circumstances." - Not supported by source. --Edge3 (talk) 01:08, 23 October 2009 (UTC)
• Refs 48 and 50 can be combined. --Edge3 (talk) 01:16, 23 October 2009 (UTC)

•  Done--TParis00ap (talk) 02:42, 23 October 2009 (UTC)

Unfortunately, there are simply too many sourcing issues with this article, and stability remains a huge concern. I am failing the article for now; feel free to nominate again when sourcing is cleaned up. --Edge3 (talk) 21:41, 23 October 2009 (UTC)

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