Talk:Colin Windon/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Lemonade51 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 17:00, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
Happy to review this.
- ”According to author Max Howell, Keith was a "football genius",[3] and was a star during the 1937 South African tour of Australia.”, because the citation is positioned next to the quote, I take it Howell didn't say he was a 'star'? If he did, the source would be better placed at the end of the sentence.
- "He was discharged from the Army on 13 August 1946.", source?
- ""Son, I don't think you will ever play for Australia” Get rid of the extra quotation mark
- ”Keith
Windondid manage to briefly resume his career…”, full name already given, so best to use in this case his first name like you've done in the previous sentences. - Windon played in ten
oftour matches - "Windon appeared in all three Tests, as well as playing for New South Wales against the tourists", then to avoid repetition the next sentence could be changed as "He scored a try in all three Tests"
- "He played in nine of Australia's ten tour matches in New Zealand", full stop.
- Wikilink Tommy Kemp and fly-half
- For Bray's book listed under references best to use full title 'The Spirit Of Rugby: A Tribute To Australian Rugby Union'
- For consistency purposes, is it Sydney Morning Herald or The Sydney Morning Herald? Going by its Wikipedia entry I'd go with the latter.
- For FitzSimon's piece, it was published in the Northern Daily Leader, not The Northern Daily Leader
- Perhaps the caption of the second image could be less idiomatic? 'In the thick of it' may confuse some readers.
No dab or dead links, no issues with the image license, reliability of refs. A well written biography in all. Will pass once comments have been addressed. Lemonade51 (talk) 17:00, 21 July 2014 (UTC)
- @Lemonade51: Thanks for the review! Everything should be addressed, including the few shockers I managed to overlook before submitted the article. Cheers. -- Shudde talk 10:25, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
- Everything's in order; shall pass now. Lemonade51 (talk) 13:30, 22 July 2014 (UTC)