Talk:Clay Walker/GA1
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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 02:01, 2 April 2010 (UTC) I'll take this up for a fellow reviewer! I'll list my suggestions below:
- The first thing I notice is the comma before "Jr.". This is frowned upon by MOS:BIO, though permitted if it's the most commonly used form in sources. Something to look at, if you haven't already
- The lead is quite short for a comparatively long article
- Do you need all of those subheadings? They make the contents table rather long- could you perhaps combine some of them rather than having almost one per year?
- I'd suggest, but only suggest, that the "biography" section be renamed to something like "early life" to better reflect its contents
- The prose gets a little choppy in places, especially the "personal life" section
I can't see any real issues with the body of the article, besides the prose and the slight zeal with section headings. The sources are all reliable and, unlike in similar articles, there's a nice variety in their breadth without being too dependent on one source (with the exception of the first, which is used 25 times!). If they're available, some more images would not go amiss- you can try asking Flickr users to release their work, it's surprising how willing many people are to release their work and it would certainly help the article. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 02:01, 2 April 2010 (UTC)