Talk:Clavado en un Bar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:05, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Reviewing an article of yours; been a good amount of time since I had previously! --K. Peake 09:05, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Remove the mixing studio from the infobox, as that is different from recording
• Why is Quinta Del Mar mentioned before Puerto Vallarta here but not in the body?
• reggae rock → Reggae rock
• Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina
• Wikilink as Fher Olvera instead
• Add a comma after fifth studio album
• "It was written by the group's lead vocalist Fher Olvera who handled productions" → "The song was written by the band's lead vocalist Fher Olvera, who handled the production"
• "The track was released as" → "It was released as"
• Wikilink lead single
• "the protagonist is" → "the protagonist is depicted as" or something similar, to be clear
• "was met with positive reactions" → "received positive reactions" and start a new para here
• Add after music critics, "who mostly praised..." whatever was highlighted the most
• "received an" → "The song garnered an"
• "Commercially, it peaked at number" → "In the United States, it peaked at numbers"
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
• "charts in the United States." → "charts, respectively."
• ""Clavado en un Bar" was" → "The song was"
• Remove Dominican Republic intro to the singer
• "and peaked at number ten" → "and the version peaked at number 10" per MOS:NUM
• Remove "in the US" at the end because we already know Billboard charts mentioned here are for that region

Background and composition

• Remove the comma after fifth studio album
• Mention that the studio is in Quinta Del Mar, Puerto Vallarta
• I can't access the El Norte source so don't know what that says about studios, but why are some from AllMusic not included?
• Pipe mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
• Remove lead vocalist introduction because that being in the lead is sufficient
• Pipe punk to Punk rock
• If the lyrics end with a full sentence quoted, punctuation should be inside the quote for "you come rescue me."

Promotion and reception

• Wikilink lead single
• "for song was filmed which" → "for the song was filmed that same year, which" per the source
• Add the word "about" after commented
• "and again at the" → "before performing the songs again at the"
• "the catchy rocker".[13] Burr" → "the catchy rocker",[13] while Burr"
• "of the Fresno Bee" → "of The Fresno Bee" with the wikilink
• Wikilink the Rolling Stones
• "that the song was" → "that the song is"
• "It also peaked" → "The song also peaked"
• The ASCAP award should be at the start of the second para instead
• "at number ten on" → "at number 10 on" per MOS:NUM
• "from the episode" → "for the episode"
• Pipe of the same name to Clavado En Un Bar (New Girl) per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "where it played" → "where it was played"

Formats and track listings

• Good

Charts

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks superb at 6.5%!!!
• Pipe El Norte to El Norte (Monterrey) on ref 1, if that is the correct publication
• Remove AllMusic from the titles of refs 2, 4, 10 and 19
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) and Nielsen Business Media to Nielsen Holdings on ref 3
• Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 5
• Add the via parameter citing Newspapers.com for refs 6, 13 and 16, only wikilinking on 6 and adding the url-access to 16
• Cite NBC 5 Dallas-Fort Worth as publisher instead on ref 11 and pipe to KXAS-TV
• Fresno Bee → The Fresno Bee on ref 14 with the wikilink and remove the double speech mark from the title
• Remove pipe on Billboard and Nielsen Business Media for ref 18
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 22 and 23
• Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina on ref 24

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold quickly following the review's opening! --K. Peake 10:27, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

• ✗ Fail now, as it's been over two weeks without a response... --K. Peake 09:50, 31 January 2022 (UTC)