Talk:Church of the SubGenius/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 01:13, 29 October 2012 (UTC)

Review

Prose comments

• On X-Day

• "Steve Bevilacqua, the Church's business manager, drew a parallel between their group's predictions and aspects of well-established religions."

  I feel that it is a bit incomplete. Would you expand a bit on which that parallel was?

Checked the source again and rephrased a bit. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

• On Publishing

• "The Church of the SubGenius emerged on the Internet in May 1993,"

  It would be good if you explain a bit how they emerged. What they did that promted this exposure on internet? [as an example]

I took another look at the source, and I think it's saying that their website first came online in May '93. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

• "Their holy books are disordered"

  Do you really mean "holy"? :O [optional]

Hmm... that's a good point. Changed "holy books" to "core texts". Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

• On Comparative religion

• "The American journalist Michael Muhammad Knight likens the Church to the Moorish Orthodox Church of America, a 20th-century American syncretic religious movement."

  It'll be good if you expand a bit onto how he likened both (how he made the comparison). [optional]

It's a little tricky, since he describes them each separately, but I've added a brief (and somewhat vague) note about how he summarizes them. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

• Thanks for the comments, I've taken a shot at handling them. Mark Arsten (talk) 23:56, 4 November 2012 (UTC)

  Great. I am done with the article. passed.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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