Talk:Christmas Time (Is Here Again)/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 16:15, 28 May 2021 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

My review of this article should start tonight, thought it might take a few days due to working at Maccys. --K. Peake 16:15, 28 May 2021 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • The length of the 1995 version is not written out anywhere in the body
    • Changed it to 2:19 as this is the time that Winn (2009) uses.
  • Genre should be named as Christmas but pipe to the same Wiki, plus write out and source the genre in background and comp since sources shouldn't be in the infobox
    • Done.
  • Separate the songwriters using bullet points instead
    • Done.
  • Pipe Christmas song to Christmas music
    • Done.
  • "by the English rock band" → "by English rock band" with the pipe
    • Done.
  • Shouldn't you mention it being recorded for their fifth Christmas record then write the title and add release year in brackets? Also, remove wikilink on Christmas record.
    • Done and done.
  • "of the group," → "of the band,"
    • Done.
  • "sung by the Beatles," → "sung by them,"
    • Done.
  • Are you sure the producer and actor introductions are needed here when they are used in the body?
    • You're right, it's not necessary. Removed.
  • It is not sourced that the refrain is the title of the song
    • It is sourced in the text below the music sample.
  • Oh sorry, must have missed that initially. --K. Peake 09:06, 31 May 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "the song remained officially" → ""Christmas Time (Is Here Again)" remained officially"
    • Done.
  • "the Beatles' Sessions album." → "the Beatles' then-upcoming album Sessions." to specify
    • Done.
  • Mention the 1995 version being released by Apple Records, plus the shortened length should be written out in the body
    • Done.
  • "was re-issued in" → "was re-issued on" with the wikilink
    • Done.
  • "of the original" → "of the band's original" for proper context
    • Done.

Background and composition

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  • Remove introduction to who the Beatles are, as that being in the lead is enough
    • Done.
  • "distributed in December" → "which were distributed in December"
    • Done.
  • The change of tense in the second sentence reads awkwardly; shouldn't it be something like "later years incorporate skits and music" because the records still exist?
    • Yeah, agreed. Fixed.
  • Shouldn't you mention the title of the record in the following sentence because even RS writes it out?
    • Done.
  • "a fictional group, "The Ravellers"," → "a fictional group named the Ravellers" per MOS:THEMUSIC and speech marks not being needed
    • Done.
  • Wikilink BBC to itself
    • Done.
  • Are you sure semi-colons should be used for the skits when this is not really presented in a list format?
    • Whoops, I forgot to change them to commas after rewriting that sentence. Fixed.
  • "and "The Ravellers" playing piano" → "and the group playing piano"
    • Done.
  • [5] should solely be at the end of the sentence especially since it is the only ref after the third comma
    • Done.
  • "calls it a" → "calls the work a"
    • Done.
  • Pipe nonsensical poem to Literary nonsense
    • Done.
  • Shouldn't the audio sample be at the start of the second para here instead?
    • Yeah, that's fair. Moved it.
  • "is one of the few credited to all four Beatles," → "is one of the Beatles' few releases credited to all four of them," to specify
    • I rephrased it as "is one of the Beatles' few releases credited to all four members,"

Recording

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  • "recorded their fifth Christmas record on" → "recorded Christmas Time Is Here Again! on"
    • Done.
  • "George Martin produced the session," → "Martin produced the session,"
    • Done.
  • Remove the comma after new EP plus mention it "was the band's first..." if this is what you mean
    • Done.
  • Merge the first and second paras
    • Done.
  • "a stage adaptation of Lennon's" → "a stage adaptation of the band member's" plus mention the book's title and add the release year in brackets
    • In writing the page for In His Own Write I realized it was actually both of Lennon's books, so I've added that info and fixed it per your suggestion.
  • "the Christmas record's recording, performing in the skits and singing" → "the record's recording; he performed in the skits and sung"
    • Done.
  • Wikilink acoustic guitar
    • Done.
  • "The band, along with" → "The Beatles, along with"
    • Done.
  • "the next day to mix the previous night's recordings." → "the day after the session to mix its recordings." since this is a new para, with the pipe
    • Done.
  • "of the Christmas record, with" → "of the record, with"
    • Done.
  • [4] should be solely at the end of the para, as it is the only ref
    • Done.

Release history

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  • Retitle to Release
    • Done.
  • "with American fans instead" → "with Americans instead" to be less repetitive
    • Done.
  • Merge the first para with the second one
    • Done.
  • "This mix was originally" → "The mix was originally"
    • Done.
  • "to executives at EMI but" → "to executives at EMI Records but" because otherwise it sounds like you are talking about the studio again
    • Done.
  • Pipe CD to Compact disc
    • Done.
  • Pipe cross-fading to Crossfade (audio engineering) per MOS:LINK2SECT
    • Done.
  • Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
    • Done.
  • "these versions of" → "the two versions of"
    • Done.
  • "CD single,[18] released in the UK" → "CD single in the UK" to avoid repetition of "released", plus move [18] to solely at the end of the sentence after [16]
    • Done.
  • "Winn writes that it is" → "Winn says it is"
    • Done.
  • "in a limited-edition box set," → "on limited-edition box set"
    • Made it "on a limited-edition box set"

Personnel

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References

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Notes

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  • Why is Ringo Starr the only member with his article directed to here?
    • I linked to him b/c he's credited under his birth name, Richard Starkey, which I wouldn't expect the average reader to know about.

Citations

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  • Copyvio score looks fantastic at 13.8%!!!
    • :)
  • uDiscover MusicuDiscoverMusic on ref 20, plus this is reliable due to the author's Record Collector work
    • Fixed.

Sources

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  • WP:OVERLINK of the Beatles on "Free as a Bird" source
    • Fixed.

Final comments and verdict

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  •   On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 09:03, 1 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Tkbrett  Pass now, you have understandable reasons for not fully implementing certain suggestions! --K. Peake 07:52, 2 June 2021 (UTC)Reply