Talk:Charon i Luren tutar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:10, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This has been in the queue for two months, therefore it is time to get going with a review! --K. Peake 07:10, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:49, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
  • Thanks.
• The subtitle is not sourced anywhere in the body
  • Added.
• Wikilink Jean Fredman
  • Done.
• The classic mythology part is not sourced in the body
  • Added.
• "asks Fredman to" → "invites Fredman to"
  • Done.
• "runs down his closes," → "runs down his clothes,"
  • Done.
• Wikilink Jesus
  • Done.
• Add a sentence about the reception of the epistle itself
  • Done.

Context

• Are you sure Jean Fredman's full name needs to be used on all of the mentions here? I never picked up on this aspect in my previous reviews
  • Indeed, surname is sufficient. I think someone else wanted Jean everywhere.
• Too much excess space at the end of this
  • Fixed, I hope.

Song

Music

• Audio sample looks good apart from the usage of the term "late" epistle; try something more appropriate and relevant
  • The last few epistles are commonly called late, like eg Shakespeare's late plays or Tolkien's late essays, it's quite a normal usage.
• Pipe courtly dance to Courtesy
  • Done.
• "consisting of seventeen lines." → "consisting of 17 lines." per MOS:NUM
  • Done.

Lyrics

• Again, should Jean Fredman's full name really be used?
  • Indeed not. Fixed.

Reception and legacy

• Img looks good!
  • Thanks.
• "of their accounts of" → "of their respective accounts of"
  • Fixed.
• "Death was present amongst" → "death was present amongst"
  • Said "the figure of Death", i.e. personified, with capital for his proper name.
• I don't think "he appears as" is the correct terminology, unless Death is a character's analysis and I'm missing something? If this is true, then the above capitalisation needn't be changed.
  • Yes, as above, he's the bloke with the black cloak and the scythe for his grim harvest.
• Introduce the other epistle as No. 24
  • Done.
• "and which is similarly addressed" → "while it is similarly addressed"
  • Edited.
• Remove comma after "best-known poem"
  • Done. There's a team of editors who add commas in odd places.
• The term "startling" does not sound very neutral; maybe try something like "sudden" instead?
  • Done; note that this paragraph is all attributed to non-editorial sources.
• Pipe intervals to Interval (music)
  • Done.
• Introduce the other epistle as No. 23
  • Done.
• "sacrificed for us" and" → "sacrificed for us", and"
  • Done.
• "There remain" what remains exactly? This needs to be more specific.
  • Actually the sentence says exactly what, the last 3 epistles, reworded.
• Pipe Liksom en Herdinna to Liksom en Herdinna, högtids klädd
  • Done.
• "of epistles 3" → "of epistles No. 3"
  • Done.
• "crossed the Styx, and had" → "crossed the Styx and had"
  • Fixed.
• Last para looks good!
  • Thanks.
• Pipe red-figure to Red-figure pottery on the last img
  • Done.

References

• Copyvio score looks solid at 23.7%!!
• Ref 11 needs the language parameter
  • Added.

Sources

• Good

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; that review progressed smoothly! --K. Peake 07:56, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

OK, I think that's all done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:50, 19 April 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, you were very understanding in any areas where we came to disagreements! --K. Peake 07:11, 20 April 2022 (UTC)