Talk:Cavalry Staff Corps/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:34, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
I will review, comments to follow over next few days. Zawed (talk) 10:34, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
Lead
- ...desertion in Wellington's armies. Suggest reciting Duke of Wellington and linking that.
Background
- ...than the rest of the army. suggest "than the rest of the British Army."
- Suggest rephrasing the second sentence to better separate Earl Bathurst from Duke of York. I initially parsed this as the Duke of York being a title of Earl Bathurst before realising they were two different people.
Formation and service in the Peninsula
- Link troop
- Any info on the service performed by the British and Irish troops of the unit?
Uniform
- suggest linking bearskin hat and light cavalry shako. These are relatively unusual items of clothing and plastron has been linkd, presumably for this reason.
Waterloo campaign
- Three men were taken from each cavalry regiment under Wellington's command, British or otherwise,... To me, the "otherwise" is quite strange usage. I think it would be better for context to refer to the Allies here e.g. "Three men were taken from each cavalry regiment, including those of Britain's allies, that were under Wellington's command" or something to that effect.
- I think the nb may work better integrated into the text; I think you are trying to say that by the time they arrived, the campaign was over?
Legacy
- May pay to link hussar braid