Talk:Cavalry Staff Corps/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:34, 1 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

I will review, comments to follow over next few days. Zawed (talk) 10:34, 1 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead

  • ...desertion in Wellington's armies. Suggest reciting Duke of Wellington and linking that.
Done - Dumelow (talk) 07:07, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Background

  • ...than the rest of the army. suggest "than the rest of the British Army."
Done - Dumelow (talk) 07:07, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Suggest rephrasing the second sentence to better separate Earl Bathurst from Duke of York. I initially parsed this as the Duke of York being a title of Earl Bathurst before realising they were two different people.
Done - Dumelow (talk) 07:07, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Formation and service in the Peninsula

  • Link troop
Done - Dumelow (talk) 07:47, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Any info on the service performed by the British and Irish troops of the unit?
Alas, nothing in particular. I suspect they were engaged in general maintenance of discipline and as orderlies but couldn't find much specific about these troops. I did find a little more on the Spanish part of the unit, which I have added - Dumelow (talk) 07:47, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Uniform

  • suggest linking bearskin hat and light cavalry shako. These are relatively unusual items of clothing and plastron has been linkd, presumably for this reason.
Done - Dumelow (talk) 07:47, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Waterloo campaign

  • Three men were taken from each cavalry regiment under Wellington's command, British or otherwise,... To me, the "otherwise" is quite strange usage. I think it would be better for context to refer to the Allies here e.g. "Three men were taken from each cavalry regiment, including those of Britain's allies, that were under Wellington's command" or something to that effect.
Good point, done - Dumelow (talk) 07:47, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • I think the nb may work better integrated into the text; I think you are trying to say that by the time they arrived, the campaign was over?
Done. Yes, but I don't know when the officers arrived only that their commissions weren't granted in time. It's not implausible that they arrived before the paperwork was finalised - Dumelow (talk) 07:47, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Legacy

  • May pay to link hussar braid
I've liked hussar, ithe article has no specific section on the distinctive bradiing but does discuss it throughout - Dumelow (talk) 07:47, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 04:32, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Thanks so much for reviewing this Zawed. I've made some changes to the article and comments above - Dumelow (talk) 07:48, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
No problem. I made a couple of minor tweaks to your additions, hope that is OK. I believe that this article now meets the GA criteria so am passing it as such. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:33, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply