Talk:Brad Walker (footballer)/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by SBFCEdit in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: SBFCEdit (talk · contribs) 22:50, 17 July 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll be taking on this review. SBFCEdit (talk) 22:50, 17 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Career

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  • Per here, the below information is absolutely tailor-made to be included in an 'Early life' sub section. If you'd prefer to put this under 'Personal life' that's up to you. Either way, I do not think the first line (School etc) should be in the career section.
"Walker was born in Billingham, County Durham and attended Northfield School & Sports College.[1][4] He joined Hartlepool United at the age of 13 and would make the 12-mile round trip to Victoria Park on his bicycle."

Hartlepool United

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Crewe Alexandra

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Shrewsbury Town

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  • I'd like to see something at the start of this that mentions his brief return to Crewe in order to sign for Shrewsbury Town.
  • [However the loan spell was ended early in March after he picked up a hamstring injury.] — more neutral to remove 'However' here.
  • I'd also like to see a little something about the number of appearances he made at Wrexham during the season (over the two loan spells).
  • [However Ricketts was sacked and Walker] — more neutral to remove 'However' here.
  • [On 12 May 2021, it was announced that he would leave Shrewsbury at the end of the season, following the expiry of his contract] — "it was announced" is not needed. I'd go with along the lines of "Walker left Shrewsbury at the end of the season, following the expiry of his contract".

Port Vale

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  • Only a suggestion, but four of the last five paragraphs in the Club career section start with "On DD MONTH YYYY". Can read like a bit of a list, so would be nice to mix it up. Each to their own and not a requirement.
  • [with League Two side Port Vale] — I have been messaged before to told that "side" is not a word that would ever be used in an encyclopedia to describe a football club. I started using "club", but again; each to their own and not a requirement.

International career

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Style of play

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Summary

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