Talk:Blonde-class cruiser/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 11:48, 2 May 2016 (UTC)

Will take this one. Parsecboy (talk) 11:48, 2 May 2016 (UTC)

• One dupe link
• Image license checks out.
• The first sentence in the service section is kinda long.
• The first sentence of the next paragraph is a little awkward too. You might actually split off the bit about being transferred to the 1st BS and merge it with the next sentence.
• I'd suggest "the enemy" -> "the Germans" - readers might not know who was on the other side. Parsecboy (talk) 11:57, 2 May 2016 (UTC)
  • Thanks, this was more of a problem to write than I honestly expected, possibly because of its brevity and the lack of action by the ships. See if the changes suit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:51, 2 May 2016 (UTC)