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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:38, 23 November 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 16:38, 23 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
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Infobox and lead edit

  • Link "girl group"
  • "released on 21 May 2015 through Syco Music"
  • "album, Get Weird (2015)."
  • "received critical acclaim from music critics"
  • "becoming the group's first single to reach number one there" → "the first Little Mix single to do so"
  • "The song remained at number one for three" → "It remained there for three"
  • Comma after "Outside of the United Kingdom"
  • "sixteen additional countries" → "16 additional countries" per MOS:NUMERAL

Background and release edit

  • Link first instance of Little Mix in the body
  • "The group said that the new album is "stronger" and will be about relationships and that is also better than their two previous albums, DNA (2012) and Salute (2013)." → "The group said that the new album would be "stronger" and "better" than their two previous albums, DNA (2012) and Salute (2013), and would be about relationships."
  • Link lead single
  • "a "whole new sound" compared to previous material."
  • "they've done" → "they have done" per MOS:CONTRACT
  • "They also said that their album was delayed due to the fact that they wrote a whole album but scrapped it, because" → "Album delays were attributed to the fact that Little Mix's original output was scrapped because"
  • "by tweeting" → "when she tweeted"
  • "the song's title to be" → "that the song was titled"
  • Link "leaked" to Internet leak
  • Last sentence needs a citation

Composition edit

  • No comma after "teen-pop song"
  • "(add.)" doesn't need to be included in this section
  • "said, that it is "Basically that"we are...""

Critical reception edit

  • "Upon its release"
  • Link "music critics" to Music journalism
  • Hyphen in "'80s-influenced"
  • "incredible catchy" should either be "incredibly" or have [sic] written after "incredible", depending on what the source says
  • Don't need (2012) after DNA since it was introduced earlier

Chart performance edit

  • "On the UK Singles Chart, the song entered at number one," → ""Black Magic" entered at number one on the UK Singles Chart"
  • Link "streams" to streaming media
  • Per MOS:EASTEREGG, link all of "European digital downloads" and not just "European"
  • Last sentence needs a citation

Music video edit

Background and synopsis edit

  • "the group posted" → "Little Mix posted"
  • "said to an interview" → "said in an interview"
  • The whole second paragraph can and should be condensed into only a few sentences; specific allusions to certain witchy media should also be included here
    •  Y Done for this section. I tried trimming the second paragraph and removed some unnecessary sentences to the best extent that I can. I also changed some tenses to past tense.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:28, 30 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Reception edit

  • "references of" → "references to"
  • "spellbinding" in quotes
  • "However, the music video also received some negative reviews." → "The acclaim for the music video was not universal."

Live performances edit

  • Comma after "Black Magic Radio Tour"
  • Comma after Total Access
  • "among singers" → "alongside singers"

Cover versions edit

  • Per WP:USEPROSE, this shouldn't necessarily be a bulletpoint list. I'd also like more detail on each one, particularly regarding release dates of these performances.
  • The Holly Kenyon one needs a citation
    • (talk page stalker) Just to note that per WP:SONGCOVER, if it can't be sourced or if there's nothing more to say than "XXXX covered the song on the 2019 album...", it should probably be removed... simply the fact that someone did a version of the song live once or recorded it on an album isn't notable, unless there has been some independent coverage and discussion of the cover. Richard3120 (talk) 14:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
      •  Y Done for this section. Thank you for the info @Richard3120:! I removed the Holly Kenyon cover 'cause I can't find a reliable source to back it up, plus, I think it's not notable enough to be included here anyway. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:53, 30 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

Formats and track listings edit

  • Good

Personnel and credits edit

  • Should be split into two columns, one for performing artists and one for the technical aspects

Accolades edit

Charts edit

Certifications edit

Release history edit

References edit

  • Unclear how you got the "Archived from the original" etc. italicized, but it shouldn't be
  • Sugarscape is inconsistently italicized throughout
  • [92] (Sugarscape) should be in title case per MOS:ALLCAPS

General comments edit

  • Images are properly licensed and relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Copyvio score looks good

Apologies for taking so long, I have been inundated with work and the holiday. Putting on hold now. — GhostRiver 18:30, 29 November 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • It's alright! I'm done implementing your suggested changes for this article. If you have any more, please do inform me. Thank you! ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:54, 30 November 2021 (UTC)Reply
    • I trimmed down the synopsis quite a bit. Please change any material that is inaccurate, as I have not seen the video, but I believe I cut most of the cruft. Looking good to pass now. — GhostRiver 23:17, 3 December 2021 (UTC)Reply
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