Talk:Black Magic (Little Mix song)/GA1
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:38, 23 November 2021 (UTC)
I'll be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 16:38, 23 November 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lead
edit- Link "girl group"
- "released on 21 May 2015 through Syco Music"
- "album, Get Weird (2015)."
- "received
criticalacclaim from music critics" - "becoming the group's first single to reach number one there" → "the first Little Mix single to do so"
- "The song remained at number one for three" → "It remained there for three"
- Comma after "Outside of the United Kingdom"
- "sixteen additional countries" → "16 additional countries" per MOS:NUMERAL
- Done for this section. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 12:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
Background and release
edit- Link first instance of Little Mix in the body
- "The group said that the new album is "stronger" and will be about relationships and that is also better than their two previous albums, DNA (2012) and Salute (2013)." → "The group said that the new album would be "stronger" and "better" than their two previous albums, DNA (2012) and Salute (2013), and would be about relationships."
- Link lead single
- "a "whole new sound" compared to previous material."
- "they've done" → "they have done" per MOS:CONTRACT
- "They also said that their album was delayed due to the fact that they wrote a whole album but scrapped it, because" → "Album delays were attributed to the fact that Little Mix's original output was scrapped because"
- "by tweeting" → "when she tweeted"
- "the song's title to be" → "that the song was titled"
- Link "leaked" to Internet leak
- Last sentence needs a citation
- Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 06:58, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Composition
edit- No comma after "teen-pop song"
- "(add.)" doesn't need to be included in this section
- "said,
that it is "Basically that"we are...""- Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:01, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Critical reception
edit- "Upon its release"
- Link "music critics" to Music journalism
- Hyphen in "'80s-influenced"
- "incredible catchy" should either be "incredibly" or have [sic] written after "incredible", depending on what the source says
- Don't need (2012) after DNA since it was introduced earlier
- Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:04, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Chart performance
edit- "On the UK Singles Chart, the song entered at number one," → ""Black Magic" entered at number one on the UK Singles Chart"
- Link "streams" to streaming media
- Per MOS:EASTEREGG, link all of "European digital downloads" and not just "European"
- Last sentence needs a citation
- Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:16, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Music video
editBackground and synopsis
edit- "the group posted" → "Little Mix posted"
- "said to an interview" → "said in an interview"
- The whole second paragraph can and should be condensed into only a few sentences; specific allusions to certain witchy media should also be included here
- Done for this section. I tried trimming the second paragraph and removed some unnecessary sentences to the best extent that I can. I also changed some tenses to past tense.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:28, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Reception
edit- "references of" → "references to"
- "spellbinding" in quotes
- "However, the music video also received some negative reviews." → "The acclaim for the music video was not universal."
- Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:31, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Live performances
edit- Comma after "Black Magic Radio Tour"
- Comma after Total Access
- "among singers" → "alongside singers"
- Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:32, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
Cover versions
edit- Per WP:USEPROSE, this shouldn't necessarily be a bulletpoint list. I'd also like more detail on each one, particularly regarding release dates of these performances.
- The Holly Kenyon one needs a citation
- (talk page stalker) Just to note that per WP:SONGCOVER, if it can't be sourced or if there's nothing more to say than "XXXX covered the song on the 2019 album...", it should probably be removed... simply the fact that someone did a version of the song live once or recorded it on an album isn't notable, unless there has been some independent coverage and discussion of the cover. Richard3120 (talk) 14:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
- Done for this section. Thank you for the info @Richard3120:! I removed the Holly Kenyon cover 'cause I can't find a reliable source to back it up, plus, I think it's not notable enough to be included here anyway. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:53, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
- (talk page stalker) Just to note that per WP:SONGCOVER, if it can't be sourced or if there's nothing more to say than "XXXX covered the song on the 2019 album...", it should probably be removed... simply the fact that someone did a version of the song live once or recorded it on an album isn't notable, unless there has been some independent coverage and discussion of the cover. Richard3120 (talk) 14:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
Formats and track listings
edit- Good
Personnel and credits
edit- Should be split into two columns, one for performing artists and one for the technical aspects
Accolades
edit- Per WP:USEPROSE, there should be some actual prose here, not just the chart
Charts
edit- Both weekly and year-end charts need a title per MOS:TABLECAPTION
Certifications
edit- Needs a title per MOS:TABLECAPTION
Release history
edit- Needs a title per MOS:TABLECAPTION
References
edit- Unclear how you got the "Archived from the original" etc. italicized, but it shouldn't be
- Sugarscape is inconsistently italicized throughout
- [92] (Sugarscape) should be in title case per MOS:ALLCAPS
- Done for this section. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 12:58, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
General comments
edit- Images are properly licensed and relevant
- No stability concerns in the revision history
- Copyvio score looks good
Apologies for taking so long, I have been inundated with work and the holiday. Putting on hold now. — GhostRiver 18:30, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
- It's alright! I'm done implementing your suggested changes for this article. If you have any more, please do inform me. Thank you! ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:54, 30 November 2021 (UTC)
- I trimmed down the synopsis quite a bit. Please change any material that is inaccurate, as I have not seen the video, but I believe I cut most of the cruft. Looking good to pass now. — GhostRiver 23:17, 3 December 2021 (UTC)