Talk:Back to the Pilot/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 22:43, 5 December 2011 (UTC)

Hello, I will be reviewing this shortly. I've never seen Family Guy, but while I've never reviewed any of its articles I've reviewed many other episode articles. The main reason I chose this one is because I am very interested in time travel. Glimmer721 ^talk 22:43, 5 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

• The fact the episode was announced at Comic-con is not important enough to be in the lead.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• "The family continually pauses for cutaways..." What are cutaways? I assume it was something common in the early days of animating Family Guy, but I looked up the word and the definitions did not match. Is there a page you could link it to?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Stewie finds Brian and the two then attempt to return to the present, but find that the transportation device's batteries are running low and moved only a bit forward in time." Moved a bit forward from the time they are in or the time they are trying to go to?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• How does the previous episode (used as the ref) support the statement that Bianchi directed the episode shortly after the ninth production season? Ditto with the fact Ron Jones has worked on the show since its inception and the fact Warbuton and Viener were "recurring voice actors".
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Meg is overlinked in the production section. Not to mention I've delinked Seth McFarlane twice in the reception section.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Mila Kunis replaced Chabert as Meg, but she had a role in The 70's show during the first season. Is this trying to imply that Kunis was Meg after the first season? And Chabert then left after the first season because of schoolwork?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• "The episode's ratings increased slightly from the previous week's episode..." By how much?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Identify that it is the A.V. Club reviewer who called it "an episode of Family Guy that rewards every viewer who liked the show in the past".
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• The fact the Daily Mail is "a British right-wing tabloid" needs a reference; it is not neutral to say that without, because it implies (to me, anyway) that the episode is being defended because this was a silly source. "British tabloid" would be more neutral.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Capitalize/wikilink Holocaust?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• How can the Time magazine's writer "continue" on from the Daily Mail?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Isn't the Entertainment Weekly criticism reported just what the Daily Mail said? It is a little repetative. I don't recommend removing it but instead say something like "Entertainment Weekly also thought the show had gone too far with the reference".
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Name the writers of the reports in Entertainment Weekly and Deadline.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Not sure the image really represents the episode well. After all, it is from the first episode (according to the caption). An image of Stewie interacting with his past self may be more appropriate and fitting. We cannot see the contrast between the animation styles well. The animation style is not discussed in the production section like the fair-use rationale says.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
• Is there anything else that could be added to the production section?
  • Done. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

That's about it. I'll place this on hold. I believe the article should pass once these issues have been fixed.

Your concerns have been addressed. Gage (talk) 05:11, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

It looks much better now and that new image illustrates both the time travel element and the animation style better than I envisioned it to. Great job! I will pass this. Glimmer721 ^talk 00:35, 10 December 2011 (UTC)