Talk:Attack on Camp Holloway/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jim Sweeney (talk · contribs · count) 12:18, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• The image used in the inf box is by Hampton Broeker according to the web site. The licenses states this image is a work of a U.S. Army soldier or employee, taken or made as part of that person's official duties. However there is nothing on the web site [1] confirming Broeker was a member of the US forces when the pictures were taken.

There is a picture of Broeker posing in full U.S. Army uniform, so I believe that is the best indication he was a U.S. Army soldier.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

• While it will not affect the review are there no other images available?
• The lead needs to be expanded ideally it should be around four paragraphs.

Done.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

• The term U.S. as in "was a U.S. facility", needs to be United States (U.S.) on first use. While a common abbreviation and obvious from the context of the article . We can not presume everyone knows what it stands for.

Done.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

• torpedo boats should be linked on first use, not the second.
• torpedoes should be linked
• from enemy forces, enemy forces is POV use North Vietnamese
• Also Viet Cong should be linked.
• General Lan Van Phat should be linked even if it creates a red link, that encourages the creation of the article.
• Link Military junta
• supporting allied operations. An explanation of who the allies are is required. Or linked.

I've decided to use the term "Free World Military Forces" instead, because "allied forces" could be anyone depending on perspective.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

• Link mortar (weapon)
• What's the difference between a combat engineer and a sapper ?

Western historians usually refer to North Vietnamese/Viet Cong special forces as "sappers". For example, the Viet Cong 409th Battalion was a special forces unit, but non-Vietnamese sources often refer to them as "sappers". So Vietnamese "sappers" are not similar to combat engineers.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

• Four ISBNs need fixing; Khoo Nicholas, Lam Quang Thi, Woods Randall and Worth Richard

All fixed.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

• Nguyen, Huy Chuong does not have an ISBN

An OCLC number is the best I can do for this one.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

Good work almost there just some small points. Jim Sweeney (talk) 12:18, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

I have provided links to the necessary articles.Canpark (talk) 13:00, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

Passed GA Jim Sweeney (talk) 13:45, 28 September 2011 (UTC)