Talk:Anushtegin Gharchai/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Amitchell125 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 11:24, 26 July 2021 (UTC)
Happy to pick this one up.
Review edit
He was the first member of his family to rule Khwarazm does not appear to be mentioned in the main text.
1 Name edit
His name – the full name is needed here. Is a separate section really needed for this sentence?
- Fixed. Imo yes, it's not that shorter compared to other name sections. --HistoryofIran (talk) 13:52, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
2 Biography edit
The link to Turkic in Turkic slave-soldiers needs to be moved up to where it first occurs in the text.The references following frontier place named Sakalkand need to be reversed so that they are in numerical order.was still commonly – still sounds redundant imo.Link steppes.Consider linking assimilated (Cultural assimilation).I would expand (1097–1231) to ‘which existed from 1097 to 1231’ or something similar.
3 Notes edit
Introduce Z. V. Togan (I would call him Zeki Velidi Togan, link him, and describe him as a Bashkir historian).
5 Sources edit
(Bos1977) I would use https://archive.org/details/laterghaznavidss0000bosw/page/n5/mode/2up.(Bos1968) I would use https://www-cambridge-org.wikipedialibrary.idm.oclc.org/core/books/cambridge-history-of-iran/political-and-dynastic-history-of-the-iranian-world-ad-10001217/024AA8933D346C06170E0D72EA6D71A4 (subscription required).
On hold edit
I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 7 August to allow time for the relatively small number of issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 12:11, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
- Passing now. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:06, 30 July 2021 (UTC)