Talk:Anna Wilson (basketball)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 23:12, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

I'll take this one. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 23:12, 10 April 2021 (UTC)

Lead

• for the Stanford Cardinal of the Pac-12 Conference. ===>>> for the Stanford Cardinal in the Pac-12 Conference of NCAA Division I women's basketball.
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 00:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• In 2014, Wilson won a gold medal as a part of team USA at the 2014 FIBA Under-17 World Championship for Women. <<<=== Rephrase here or later on so it's not exactly the same as what's in the prose. Relatedly, you don't need to write "In 2014" when it says "2014" in the name of the tournament.
  • Reworked. Therapyisgood (talk) 00:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• I believe it's "Team USA" (capital "Team") if you want to write it that way.
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 00:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• Wilson, who graduated high school in 2016, attended Stanford University, where, as a fifth-year senior, she won the 2021 NCAA Division I Women's Basketball Championship Game. <<<=== Too much to cover high school and college in one sentence.
  • Expanded. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:26, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• The lead should be expanded. You could add her injury difficulties, and that she became a starter in college.
  • Expanded. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:26, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• She is the sister of Seattle Seahawks quarterback Russell Wilson. ===>>> Her brother Russell Wilson is a quarterback for the Seattle Seahawks in the National Football League.
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 00:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)

Early life

• You could add started playing (or was playing) by age five.
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 14:55, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
• Since it's related to her father coaching her, you could add that her father died when she was 12.
  • I don't think it's super relevant. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
• You can add her father's sports background.
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:41, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
• Maybe also add her mother's sports background.
  • I don't think she has enough of one to mention. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:41, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
• I would split the high school career part into a separate "High school career" section.
  • I think it's OK. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:41, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
• 34th-best player in the USA ===>>> 34th-best player (avoid "USA" in general per MOS:NOTUSA, but it's also already clear in the previous sentence).
  • Removed. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:58, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• Wilson qualified ===>>> Wilson was named OR Wilson was selected to (I don't think "qualified" is correct. Someone chooses who plays. There is no method of qualification.)
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 14:40, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• comprises American and Canadian ===>>> comprises many of the top-ranked American and Canadian
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 14:40, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• boys' and girls' <<<=== rephrase; it's two games, one for boys and one for girls
  • How would you like me to rephrase this? Therapyisgood (talk) 17:02, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
    • I edited in a new version. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:13, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
• which Wilson reported was her third ===>>> her third (it's concrete enough that you don't need "reported")
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:59, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• End this section with stating she committed to Stanford. Also, do you know where else she considered or had offers?
  • Added where she had offers. I mention she committed to Stanford as a sophomore in high school earlier. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:19, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Moved. Therapyisgood (talk) 23:03, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
      • Ah, I missed that completely. Still, it generally makes more sense to group it with the recruiting rankings. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:13, 17 April 2021 (UTC)

Collegiate career

• I would call this section "College career" given that "college basketball" is the more official term.
  • OK. Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:00, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• Start off with something like "Wilson only played [number of] games her freshman year due to health issues."
  • Reworked. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:36, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• How many starts did she have her sophomore year?
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:36, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• She was also injured during her sophomore year, but that's not mentioned.
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:46, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• There are places where too many consecutive sentences start with "Wilson", where "she" could replace the second instances
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:56, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• You could add how Stanford did in the NCAA tournament in the previous years, or at the very least in 2019.
  • Added 2019. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:31, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• Add that she started every game as a fifth-year senior
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:47, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• You could make note of her career-high for points in a game, including when and against who.
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:50, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• State who Stanford played in the championship game and the final score.
  • Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• Minor note: It seems like there is a space before the apostrophe in "National Collegiate Athletic Association's"
  • Fixed. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:03, 15 April 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

• collegiate ===>>> college
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 00:57, 15 April 2021 (UTC)

Overall

• Most if not all of the archived references still work, but the url-status = live isn't set.
  • This has been changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 00:56, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
• Other than that, everything seems to be cited and the references are formatted very well.

This isn't going to be that long of an article, but there are still some more things you could add to it to be more complete. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:29, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

@Sportsfan77777: I believe I've taken care of everything. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:43, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

Last comments:

• In the lead, "A Stanford commit" ===>>> "At Stanford" ("commit" makes it sound like this sentence is going to cover high school)
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 13:59, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
• In the lead, "started all games" ===>>> "started every game"
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 13:59, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
• In early life, committed to (agreed to attend and play for) <<<=== I don't think you need to explain this, or instead just "committed to attend and play for" (the parentheses don't fit)
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 14:03, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
• In college career, "played thirty-one minutes with four rebounds, three assists and five points" ===>>> "played thirty-one minutes, accumulating five points, three assists and four rebounds." (It's standard to list points first unless you are trying to highlight a non-point stat in particular.)
  • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 14:03, 17 April 2021 (UTC)

Therapyisgood, just a few more comments above. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:13, 17 April 2021 (UTC)

Passing, good work! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 23:12, 17 April 2021 (UTC)