Talk:Angélique Duchemin/GA1
Latest comment: 2 months ago by Rollinginhisgrave in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Nominator: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 17:56, 26 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 09:38, 21 August 2024 (UTC)
Easy one, nice and quick. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:38, 21 August 2024 (UTC)
Prose and content
editand became World
the World per false titles- It would be good to include that she was born in Thuir in the Early life section, so the claim has an inline cite and the infobox can more effectively be a summary of the body.
- Why do you include her mother's surname but not her fathers? The source does not mention her mother's surname.
- Added an obituary. Not the best source but hopefully OK with the other source used. If not, I can remove the surname. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:53, 30 August 2024 (UTC)
Her brother also took up boxing
brothersage of 7
seven MOS:NUMBERS (not GA requirement)- (nitpicky) begin
In 2012 she
with Duchemin since it's the start of a new paragraph (not GA requirement) title with a unanimous decision
in a unanimous ?- just call cardiac massage CPR.
seemingly of a pulmonary embolism
I don't think this is necessary information given you immediately correct it, and it just seems to be proseline information.Her father had died after a heart attack in 2013,[7] experienced while he was painting boxing ring posts.
died from a heart attack, don't need the word experienced or the comma.Duchemin during a boxing bout
don't need a caption for this image
Other
edit- Sources checked (checked as I went through)
- Images fair use, low quality
- Stable
- Neutral
- Broad / summary style
- No OR/COPYVIO 13% Earwig, no issues
Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:38, 21 August 2024 (UTC)
- Many thanks, Rollinginhisgrave. I've acted on your comments. Please let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:54, 30 August 2024 (UTC)
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