Talk:Analytical Dynamics of Particles and Rigid Bodies/GA1
GA Review edit
| GA toolbox |
|---|
| Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 18:07, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
Happy to review the article.
Review edit
Initial comment edit
Hi Footlessmouse, I'm concerned about the amount text in the article devoted to the book's numerous reviews (about half the article's text), in comparison with the discussion of the book itself (about a third). I think the reviews section would benefit from being trimmed back a bit, with more information provided about the book's historical context, style, and what existed for physicists and mathematicians before its publication. What do you think? Amitchell125 (talk) 19:15, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
Problems that need to be addressed edit
- Both the lead section and the main text don’t cover the main aspects of the topic, with several sections focusing on other people's opinions of the book (see my unanswered comment above).
- The text could be more concisely written.
- There are external links in the main text of the article.
- The article contains superfluous words that cannot be verified, for example: heavily; very successful; many positive; more than historically influential, etc. etc (see MOS:PUFFERY).
- There is a great deal of quoted text, that could be paraphrased.
- The article needs to be checked for missing wikilinks, many others could be added without the risk if overlinking.
As the article is some way off from being GA, according to criteria 1 and 3, I am failing it. Amitchell125 (talk) 15:13, 20 April 2021 (UTC)