Talk:Ammophila sabulosa/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 15:09, 13 January 2022 (UTC)Reply


Reviewing now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:09, 13 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

  • Found in northern Europe, – contradicts distribution section
    • Fixed.
  • You have both "solitary wasp" and "hunting wasp", which can be confusing; stick with one?
    • Both widely-used terms, and the hunting wasps are a subset of the solitary wasps, too. Edited.
  • The whole body is black except for – contradiction --> "The body is black except for"
    • Fixed. Not really a contradiction in ordinary English.
  • "waist", "tail" – it is great to make it as comprehensible as possible, but I really think that the correct terms should be provided as well, or at least linked to (e.g., Petiole (insect anatomy)
    • Linked.
  • millimeters, mm – this could be consistent
    • Fixed.
  • The pattern of the forewings also differs: the third submarginal cell makes broad contact with the cell to its front and the rear end of the abdomen has a faint metallic blue sheen.[3] – but the latter is not forewing anymore
    • Fixed.
  • The wasp grabs the upper (dorsal) side of each caterpillar, – why "each"? "the" seems more natural.
    • Done.
  • so that the wasp larvae will have fresh food to eat. – that seems imprecise. I think there is a specific reason, was it fungi?
    • It's a good reason: the prey stays alive, so it is fresh, not dead and rotten, whether through bacterial or fungal decay - bacteria are surely the main agents, but that's not the concern here.
      • OK. I was remembering this: [1] – in this similar case, the paralyzation did not result in the prey staying fresh longer; instead, this wasp did additional cleaning to reach this effect. And fungi were the major problem here. But that's a different species, so ok. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 18:44, 13 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Ref #9 lacks information.
    • Cited.
  • Article currently fails 3 (Broad in its coverage). It simply lacks depth. A quick search returns several papers that contain important information, and much of it is not incorporated here.
    • I'll do another trawl now. I've added some (hyper)parasites......
      • I was looking at this: [2] It has hunting behavior (how it finds caterpillars, etc.); shape and size of the chamber; the importance of the location of the egg; and more. That all seems very interesting. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 18:44, 13 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
        • Yes, I had the paper open in front of me and was just wondering what to say from it! Added several details.
  • Also, a basic taxonomy section is lacking, with the first description cited. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:29, 13 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
    • Added.
Many thanks, it was worth a second trawl for details. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:32, 14 January 2022 (UTC)Reply