Talk:Alphastates/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 21:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

All looks pretty good to me- I'm happy with the comprehensiveness, MoS compliance and reliability of sources, but it could use a quick copyedit to make the prose more engaging- for example, sentences like "A former member was drummer Mike O'Dowd who departed in 2008" are not grammatically brilliant. I'd also like to see a little more detail, particularly on the band history, in the lead. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 21:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

How's that? --candle•wicke 22:29, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

That'll do nicely. Good work. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 23:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. :-) --candle•wicke 00:52, 8 March 2010 (UTC)