Talk:Allie Brosh/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 21:49, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

This article looks to be in good shape. I will go ahead and review it.

Here's my full list:

• Lead could be made longer and more complete.
• Brosh was raised in small towns—first in Auburn, California, then near Sandpoint, Idaho—which she says let her "be a little bit weirder" Specify exactly what about this let her be weirder and include her age when she moved.
• Maybe briefly describe what the book she wrote as a child was about without getting trivial.
• I'm not quite sure of the best way to restructure the article to accommodate the change, but the section about her blog includes information from later dates, messing up the chronological order. Similar issues can be found in other areas.
• There is still a citation needed tag.
• The phrase "Brosh underwent major surgery for stage IV endometriosis" is used twice in the article and linked for both of them. Remove one or at least reword it and remove the link.

Not bad. My apologies for taking so long. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 03:10, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Thanks very much for this positive review. I've edited the article and below are my responses:

• Header: I've expanded this.
• Childhood: Unfortunately this is all the information I know of around her childhood so I can't add any more.
• Childhood book: Added more detail.
• Time order: I've done some reordering to make the article more in chronological order.
• Citation needed: Removed uncited matter.
• Overlinking: Removed second link.

HenryCrun15 (talk) 04:27, 10 April 2022 (UTC)

Excellent work. It has been passed. --An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 18:18, 10 April 2022 (UTC)