Talk:Al Capone/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:00, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

This looks good. I'll start leaving comments within a couple of days. ♦ jaguar 23:00, 5 February 2021 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay. I'll start the review tomorrow. ♦ jaguar 23:17, 8 February 2021 (UTC)

Career

• "he purchased a small house at 7244 South Prairie Avenue in the Park Manor neighborhood on the city's south side" - in
• "Joe Howard was killed on May 7, 1923 after he tried to interfered with the Capone-Torrio bootleg" - interfere
• "Torrio took over Colosimo's crime empire after Colosimo's murder on May 11, 1920" - might read better as Torrio took over Colosimo's crime empire after the latter's murder on May 11, 1920
• "such as the makers of Vine-Glo (that wine could be made from)" - if Vine-Glo is already blue-linked then I don't think it's necessary to explain what it is in brackets
• "Capone ally Ralph Sheldon attempted to kill" - Capone's
• "They filed a writ of habeas corpus based on a Supreme Court ruling" - italicise

Failing health and death

• "after a few weeks of inpatient and a few weeks of outpatient care" - no need for repetition

References

• Where is the bibliography section? I notice many of the prominent harv citations don't link to anything

This article is excellently written overall, evidenced by the few minor points I raised above. The only thing preventing me from passing this outright was the broken citations. There are many harv citations with nothing linking them, so references to the books will have to be made. Very well done with this article, I enjoyed reviewing it. ♦ jaguar 12:25, 10 February 2021 (UTC)

@Jaguar: Thanks, I've fixed everything you pointed out, and added the harv citation which I forgot to transfer from Joe Aiello when I attributed some of the prose from there. If there are any other broken links please let me know. Vaselineeeeeeee^★★★ 14:32, 10 February 2021 (UTC)

Thank you Vaseline. I really couldn't find much to pick with this one - you could consider taking this to FAC in the future. With that out of the way, I'll be happy to promote this. ♦ jaguar 21:26, 10 February 2021 (UTC)