Talk:Akshata Murty/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 18:15, 3 December 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. An anonymous username, not my real name 18:15, 3 December 2022 (UTC)

Non-issues

1. Images are good and tagged correctly.
2. Stable and neutral.
3. There are some extensive similarities to [1] and [2], however based on the dates, it seems most likely they were copied from here rather than the other way around, after careful inspection of the page history.

Things I would recommend changing

1. Per MOS:LEADCITE, her name and the date of her birth shouldn't need a citation in the lead, as that is not a statement that is "challenged or likely to be challenged".
2. Her personal wealth became the topic of British media discussion in the context of her claim of non-domiciled status in the UK. The body doesn't really elaborate on the "British media discussion".
3. "Early life and education" would be better condensed into one or two paragraphs. Also, the parts about her education could use some dates.
4. Can you find the names of her maternal grandparents?
5. As per an anonymous source, Murty had a comparatively simple middle class upbringing in Jayanagar, a suburb of Bangalore, with no birthday parties or much pocket money. Everything about this statement is rather vague, besides the location.
6. She is a director of Digme Fitness, and digital transformation company Soroco that her brother Rohan Murty co-founded. This sort of comes out of nowhere. Could it be better integrated into the other information on her career?
7. In April 2022 it was reported that she is a non-domiciled resident of the United Kingdom Reported by who?
8. Murty announced that she would give up her non-domiciled status and pay UK taxes on her worldwide income voluntarily. When did she announce this?

That is all I've noticed so far. I can understand if you can't find better info for a couple of these, but most should be fixable. An anonymous username, not my real name 20:05, 3 December 2022 (UTC)

Tweaked the sources, links and references. 7&6=thirteen (☎) 14:17, 4 December 2022 (UTC)

1 - I've removed the citations from the lede CT55555(talk) 14:01, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

2 - I've fixed that. Diff CT55555(talk) 14:05, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

3 - I've combined into two paragraphs and added dates for school and college CT55555(talk) 14:15, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

4 - I've added them from her mothers wikipedia page which uses offline sources, I assume they are accurate. CT55555(talk) 14:22, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

5- I agree. I suspect this is PR/PROMO motivated words. I've deleted most of this, but kept the location as I could find a reliable source for that, written by her mother. CT55555(talk) 14:24, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

6 - I agree. I've done some light copy editing to make it flow better from the proceeding sentences. CT55555(talk) 14:28, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

7 - I think the wording was unnecessarily careful, nobody disputed the claim, so I changed it to simply state the facts, rather than suggest there was a counter narrative. CT55555(talk) 14:30, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

8 - She made the promise to drop her status that same month and I've updated the article to say that. CT55555(talk) 14:42, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

@User:An anonymous username, not my real name this concludes my edits in response to your agreeable, helpful, and clear feedback. Please let me know if you feel any further edits are necessary to meet Good Article status. CT55555(talk) 14:43, 7 December 2022 (UTC)

Sorry for being a little late, but it looks ready now. I will pass it. An anonymous username, not my real name 01:59, 16 December 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for your clear and agreeable approach to this process! I am delighted with the outcome. CT55555(talk) 02:13, 16 December 2022 (UTC)